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Desperate House Wife

Is it so hard to give me

five minutes of your time?

Can I just have a second,

to let you know what's on my mind.

It's possibly my own fault and

you only want your friends,

but baby I'm serious, 

I want to make ammends. 

 

You seem to have

a new love in your life,

She must mean more to you,

then your beautiful wife.

It hurts me to know,

that you cannot stand my sound,

what hurts me even more is,

you cannot stand to be around.

 

Did she give you something,

that I could never give?

Is she the reason,

you continue to live?

Why am I such

a burden to you?

When all I want to hear is,

"baby I love you too." 

 

Chantelle DeJong 9/30/07

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  • tabbykat10988
    October 20, 2007
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    wow.. i absolutely love it... it made me think... i just got married like a week ago and if my husband just forgot about me or just didnt care anymore i dont know what i would do.. the fact that your still here .... says you won and thats something to be proud of .. great job and good luck in the contest.
    -tk


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    October 16, 2007

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    I truly can connect with the poem. What makes a husband walk away from his wife. A question that cannot be completely answered but it is never just one persons fault. It takes two to tango and two to get married or break it apart.

    Great write with a fluid flow and a solid story.

    Glad to have you here at AP and please feel free to contact me or any online Greeter if you need help here at AP.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary


  • Me a poet-maybe
    October 3, 2007

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    Heart felt

    I feel the pain, maybe because I've been there. One thing I know is that if I were him...my dear...you might get sick of hearing " I LOVE you...."
    At this point in my life....someone to tell that to is what I long for most...


  • BeautifulFlame
    October 2, 2007

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    I have to say this is remarkable! I have lived this way for almost 19 yrs and its a horrible thing to hurt like that !
    I can relate
    Great write!
    ~Lisa~
    my heart goes out..

  • Liquid memories
    October 1, 2007
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    thank you for sharing


  • lindaburns gold member
    October 1, 2007
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    It's a common story and you tell it well. Write on.


  • raggyann
    September 30, 2007
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    ahh this is so sad

  • Mercury Rising
    September 30, 2007

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    A very poignant and touching poem that was written from the heart. Best of luck, and thanks for entering.

    David

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