Within the woods
She stands waiting
And there is silence
The sun is streaming
Her sheer garment's gleaming
and there is silence
She stands awaiting loves embrace
But it does not come
And there is silence
All is silence
Author notes
I chose pic #2
A contest entry
- Within the light- PIF contest Picture prompt by HeavenonEarth.
475 points, ended October 1, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i really liked how this flowed. and stressing to the reader that it was silent, not too much, but enough.
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There is nothing worse than being left standing.
I can feel the expectance of love, but there are twinges of disapointment encroaching.
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Silence is golden they say, but in this case I think your words make it even more priceless. I enjoyed this wondrous read.
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I love this! I read it and then looked at the picture. Your words give it context and meaning. Your diction is well chosen and the short lines create a wonderful contrast to the lingering streams of sunlight and silence.
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a Melody
This sounds like a melody to me- the song escapes me at the moment but if I remember I will come back and let you know..It's quite a peaceful melodic song and that's what this prose reminds me of. I think you did a good on the picture prompt. Now I will be wondering what the title of the song is
All the best in the contest and Thank you so much for entering
Many Blessings~
~Joy
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