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* Never *

This song will never be in tune
As our love will never be in bloom
Let me die with this silent pain
As my true desires drive me insane
Drunk with the fantasies in my mind
As my reality is so unkind

Author notes

Wow...My muse took *full* control over this one...I give her all the credit...
Written October 2nd, 2003

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  • nieneve
    October 4, 2003
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    uber-cool

    WOW me an mom both love it


  • arden
    October 4, 2003
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    'Drunk with the fantasies in my mind
    As my reality is so unkind'

    what a muse. this is nothing short of sheer perfection.


    arden


  • Daoine
    October 3, 2003
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    Excellent flow. Your talent blooms with every poem.
    Very angst ridden. Terrific write.
    Daoine

  • a raw rose
    October 2, 2003
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    Mi amore, you keep getting better and better! Beautiful write! I especially like the rhyme scheme here. I'm an autrocious rhymer, so anyone that can rhyme has my full respect!

    Love ever--

    Erica


  • Bluestar
    October 2, 2003
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    Defintely brilliant stuff here, Scarlett! Your muse did a good job, loved the lines:

    Drunk with the fantasies in my mind
    As my reality is so unkind

    Letting your fantasies proclaim your happiness, letting them make up for your painful reality - great concept
    Loved this one
    Much love to you
    ~*blue*~
    xxx xxx


  • Madison Attitude
    October 2, 2003
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    nice, very nice

    love aimee jo xo

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