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The Begining of...

As the ashtray fills I tip my cup
words run wild through ashes, dust.
Sun comes up, a blurry Moon glides astray
night is over, the sun is back.
My labyrinth unveils itself again

by passages  a muck...
But, I'll reveal my sins, and go in peace.
My end only begins.

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  • poetryality silver member
    October 1, 2007

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    A very interesting take on the given prompt poet. I am smoker so, I can easily relate to your opening lines. The eclipse from night to day is soothing. There are layers in these few words. They do send a mysterious chill over me. I love the feel of the work. I am the poet that likes to "unveil" messages in poetry. I like this poem in a strange connective way. Thank you for this entry and I wish you well in the comp.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • LezzieC76
    September 30, 2007

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    I love the mystery behind this poem! You could go many different ways with it, and I love it. It almost as if you have left the true meaning of the poem up to the reader! Awesome job!


  • Nostalgia
    September 30, 2007

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    I don't know what to say...Mysterous and deeply secretive....Beautiful and touching. The imaginary was wonderful....I really enjoyed this piece, for being so short it was lovely. My favorite line is, 'My end only begins'....It leaves you hanging...Thinking......Is the end really the end? Is there ever really a beginning? Beautiful piece. I really enjoyed reading this. I could catch no awkward areas....I loved it all.