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Flight of the Swallows

 

Towards Capistrano swallows are flying,

southern journey their annual retreat.

Sitting on the park bench softly sighing,

heavenly sight, I'm left feeling replete.


 

Mission bells sounding; the flight is complete,

South West Cali is their spring residence.

Wings beating softly, singing songs so sweet,

it's overall that they take precedence.


 

Yet everyone remains in accordance,

it's in nature's reverence they wallow.

Tourists flocking in over abundance,

here to see the return of the swallow.

 

 

Come and stay at one of the local inns,

book a room before the journey begins.

Author notes

Though most birds will migrate in the fall, the swallows make their annual migration to Capistrano in the spring. I am providing a link to a site which tells of the occurence.
http://www.missionsjc.com/swallows.html

Spenserian sonnet: The Spenserian sonnet, has the pattern: a b a b b c b c c d c d e e Here, the "abab" pattern sets up distinct four-line groups, each of which develops a specific idea; however, the overlapping a, b, c, and d rhymes form the first 12 lines into a single unit with a separated final couplet. The three quatrains then develop three distinct but closely related ideas, with a different idea (or commentary) in the couplet. Interestingly, Spenser often begins L9 of his sonnets with "But" or "Yet," indicating a volta exactly where it would occur in the Italian sonnet; however, if one looks closely, one often finds that the "turn" here really isn't one at all, that the actual turn occurs where the rhyme pattern changes, with the couplet.


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  • karmacae
    October 16, 2007

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    oh such a beautiful piece you have hear. I was taken there with just your words...lol and liked the notes. now I know what a sonnet is and how to do it...lol


    • seamaiden
      October 16, 2007
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      It is amazing how nature works and the fact that these birds make this journey every single year is so interesting. I do hope you will look at the link I added for the site which explains a little about the migration. Thank you for the applauses and your kind words. I'm glad you liked this, it is one of my favorites. seamaiden ♥

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 16, 2007

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    This is a beautiful piece you have done here thank you for your entry and good luck to you in the contest.Best wishes


    • seamaiden
      October 16, 2007
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      Thank you for the kind words you have given me and the best wishes. This was my first piece that I did on AP and I'm glad you liked it. seamaiden ♥


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 12, 2007

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    beautiful

    A lovely Spenserian sonnet. And such and interesting topic. Congratulations on your trophy. This piece is really quite lovely. ~Pamela


    • seamaiden
      October 12, 2007
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      I had heard the song not long before I saw the contest. It prompted me to google it and this is what I got from it. Thank you for the applause and your kind words. Thank you for the congratulations too. Your poem was even more beautiful. You are a very good poet. I will have to look at some more of your work. Thank you for coming by. seamaiden ♥


  • bethan-gaze
    October 12, 2007

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    Hey Hun, I am SO proud of you and SO pleased for you!! Congrats on securing the silver shiny ... knew this would place. Lots of love xxx


    • seamaiden
      October 12, 2007
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      Thank you so much for coming back and congratulating me like that. I was very happy to see that it placed as high as it did. There were some lovely poems entered into that contest and yours was one of them. Thank you again I appreciate this so much. seamaiden ♥


  • FifthDove
    October 5, 2007

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    Welcome to the site!

    What a delightful sonnet to read. I am a bird lover so hence, I love the poem. Nice work here Thank you very much for sharing your words with all of us here. I would like to take this opportunity to welcome you to Allpoetry. I know being new to a site you may have a few questions or concerns, so please feel free to ask any greeter or use the "Help" tab at the top of your page


    • seamaiden
      October 5, 2007
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      This was even more delightful to write. I had heard the song, that inspired me to do this. The link I left for the site is interesting and it was worth reading. Thank you for such a warm welcome, everyone so far has been the same. I will let you know if I have anything I need to ask about. Thank you for the applause and your words so kind. seamaiden ♥


  • Arkbear gold member
    October 1, 2007

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    Score: 96.4

    Rich.....but the Font & Flow was my main concern ~

     

    God luck Poet!

     

    Bear ~


    • seamaiden
      October 1, 2007
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      Thank you for your words and wishes. I did change the font style and spaced between stanzas. seamaiden ♥

  • ecrivain01
    October 1, 2007

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    The song was great ...

    but probably you're too young to have heard it:

    "When The Swallows Come Back To Capistrano".

    Anyway, I like the poem. Nicely done.


    • seamaiden
      October 1, 2007
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      It did come out before my time, though I have heard it many times and love it. I heard it just recently and that was part of my inspiration here. Thank you for the applause and your words. They are appreciated very much. seamaiden ♥


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    October 1, 2007

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    So beautifully done, this is a subject that just fascinates...you've taken me there with your words.


    • seamaiden
      October 1, 2007
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      The song was always one I enjoyed and I had heard it and I thought to do this. I'm glad you like this. The link is very interesting too. seamaid ♥


  • Dragons Lady
    September 30, 2007

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    An interesting subject you have chosen. I loved reading it. Vivid imagery and smooth flow are both present. Wonderful write. Good luck in the contest.


    • seamaiden
      September 30, 2007

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      Thank you for coming by this one too and leaving me your applause and comment. I had heard the song that day. lol I'm glad you like this. My first try at this. Thank you for the good luck wish too. seamaiden ♥


  • Amera gold member
    September 30, 2007

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    This is beautiful! You have the heart of a poet. It is perfectly written in decasyllable with a wonderful meter and flow. The image is delightful and I love the concluding couplet.

    Love,
    Amera♥


    • seamaiden
      September 30, 2007
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      Thank you for being so complimentary to this work and for applauding. I have read a good deal of poetry and I'm trying my hand at it now. After reading your poem from the spotlight I wanted to try one myself. You have given me much needed confidence with your words. seamaiden ♥


  • bethan-gaze
    September 30, 2007
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    This is astonishingly good ... very well crafted and an absolute pleasure to read.  Best of luck in the contest, hun. Wink


    • seamaiden
      September 30, 2007
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      Thank you for the welcome and for stopping to read. Your poem was so enjoyable. I love all types of poetry. I appreciate the applause and comment. seamaiden ♥


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    September 30, 2007

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    ooooh great work here. and first post on AP so welcome This is lovely, i enjoy the rhyme and flow. wish you best of luck in this contest

    Tasha


    • seamaiden
      September 30, 2007
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      Thank you so much for coming by and welcoming me. I appreciate the applause and comment. seamaiden ♥

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