Wanton whirl is dance of fall in her autumn dress,
on carpet gold sheds burnished veil her suitor to impress.
He comes ermine laden, sleeves her arms in white,
takes bridal toll, bejewels her soul with stars and diamond light.
'Ere long she tires of regal stroll, snow-robed weighted hours,
and melts his heart, in gentler art, comes out in meadow flowers.
She smiles in fun, tempts the sun with lupine wreaths of laughter.
Beguiling look, voice lilting brook, now spring, he tumbles after.
On winds of summer melodies, spins greener thread to stitch
memories for autumn leaves, life's tapestries grown rich.
Author notes
Please see:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3456576
There is music in your tapestries, kaibab!
A contest entry
- Snow Blind by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended October 1, 2007, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A beautiful sharing ...
that had imagery complete and a most unique way of describing the seasonal changes and a lovely mirror of metaphor as well. I'm glad that I found your first poem that then led me to read more of yours.
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This, is a tribute to Rich, known as kaibab here on AP. He writes incredible poetry and often leaves me speechless with images and ideas. Some are like paintings, which he is good at, too. Not nearly a match for his talent, I often leave him rhyming responses anyway. I hope you are acquainted with his writing.
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a beautiful write, a wonderful metaphor of life in general. I thoroughly enjoyed this read. Well done.
Rory
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Beautifully written. Every stanza rhyme showing the expression of the poem. Could be a song. Good luck in the contest.
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Very nice ...
and with a little tweaking this would have made a great sonnet.
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I love how you delve into the situation as it's presented here and with such attention to the finer aspects of writing as well. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet. ~Midnight Lace
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What a surprise! It's been a while...and it nice to know you are are still writing. My pen is busy sometimes, and very quiet others times these days. May you and your little one be blessed. ~ K
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Beautiful!
You have woven a tremendous beautiful cloth of words....I am amazed with you....with this...awesome work! Smiles, Terry -
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Thank you, Terry. 'kaibab' inspired this... His poetry is astounding and has such a unique style. Maybe you know him already, but if not then maybe you will later. ~ Karen
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lovely
This personification of the seasons is lovely. The images are beautiful, "He comes ermine laden, sleeves her arms in white". Congratulations on the HM.
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this was so very beautiful
your words filled my mind with images
that were lovely
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Raggyann...a perfect compliment to autumn. Thank you!
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beautiful
The personifcation of the seasons was lovely and well worded!
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this is WONDERFUL! great use of rhyme and very creative, very well done and congrats on the HM trophy,well deserved
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love the way you talk about autumn.well writen poem.
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A beautifully penned ode to mother earths change from eveningwear, to her gown for the ball. I loved the flow and imagery, as well as the clarity. You have penned a wonderful piece. Thank you for sharing
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I'm delighted. Thank you. I like the icon of the lighthouse. It's been a while since I visited one, but they have such mystique, and always stories and folklore about them.
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ooh, i like it
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There is music in your tapestries
Beguiling look, voice lilting brook, now spring, he tumbles after. Well worthy of more than an honorable mention and more than a passing look
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So nice to see your comment here on my page, Jonathan! Thank you. I'm glad you approve...and you left me such a smile! ~ Karen
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oh wow i love it...you did well with the rymeing as well with the story of the poem as a whole... I LOVE IT!!!!
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I know you've been to my page at least once before. What a smile you are! Thank you. I see you are from Texas...have some beautiful friends there and am looking forward to adding you, too. ~Karen
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thank you im glad you enjoy me. lol. yeah there are some beautiful people here as well as in Oregon... i have friends there to... they are very wonderful people there.
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Very nice ...
a little work and this could be a sonnet.
Good job in any case.
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Your words are a lush enchantment, full of the breath and beauty thanks makes us children before a table of wonder. Thank you.
Love, Tom B.
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Beautiful, a wonderful picture you paint in my mind.Thankyou for sharing.Kindest thoughts.Anna-Marie.
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Excellently and imaginatively rhymed--there's a classical cadence to this which really adds greatly to the theme. Very well done.
Bill
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I broke the more modern rules of poetry by using personification, but it seemed to fit the cadence of dance to do so, and seasons seamlessly come together, each in their own sort of harmony. Thanks, Bill
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This is not pedestrian at all. It is beautiful! I hope you have entered my rhyme time contest too. There are few people who can rhyme and still have such strong imagery. Thank you very much for entering.
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Lovely Poem
Very nice words you use to fill the page with lovely imagery as Mother Nature dresses for fall. Great write and a pleasure to read. You take care, Sandy
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Isn't Mother Nature beautiful when she's mellow? Thank you for sharing, Sandy. I'm glad you enjoyed the read! ~ Karen
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you used very nice and well formed words, the autumn weather brought sunshine and many dances to this form,nice decissive post good luck in the contest...mm
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No contest....just a tribute... so glad you stopped to read and i want to say that your icon is burnished beauty, too.
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I've just Rich's autumn poem and yours truly echo the music of his, Karen. Simply beautiful...it reads like a song - so elegant and graceful and soothing the promises you've gathered here among these lines. Wonderful colour and rhythm of leaves, soul and smiles here. I know Rich will love this...you've even included his name. Beautiful tapestry of words, my friend.
~ Nicolette
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I'm just keeping time to his music with a simple tap-tap. ~ Karen
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Such beautiful sentence grace and language you have used. Kaibab
will love this.
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I can't begin to do his poetry justice, but he so often leaves me smiling from the heart out at his art!
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