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_-_Ice's Last Touch: Haiku to M.S._-_

When our lips first met
Crystallized ice in my veins
Froze eternally

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Written October 2nd, 2003

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  • No--Name
    October 14, 2004
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    Very evocative and powerful for such a sort piece. I love short poems, they always have that special quality only to be contained in what has been compressed into such a small amount of words. I could almost feel the ice on my lips Thanks for sharing!


  • Sunshine
    December 29, 2003
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    Very Creative

    I like this. Such emotion from so little amount of lines. Very potent write. The picture in the background is awesome, by the way. Good luck with your writing...But I can see from this piece that you won't need any more luck.
    God Bless, Sunshine
    P.S. Thanks for your comments.

  • sniffpixysticks
    October 7, 2003
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    thats a really cool poem

    sniffs

  • MysticRoseTears
    October 2, 2003
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    great short poem...i love the background!


  • Bluestar
    October 2, 2003
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    BEAUTIFUL!!! wow...the whole thing is just PERFECT!! you know you are brilliant at haiku, Scarlett?!! 'Crystallized ice' is such a gorgeous expression - keep them coming
    Much love to you
    ~*blue*~
    xxx xxx

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