My beautiful mistake,
my beautiful lie.
Come on, you made me cry.
A faked smile?
A real tear?
You ripped my heart, can't you see?
Watch me fall
Do you enjoy it at all?
You made me feel so small-
I just asked for your heart
Why did you tear me appart?
Was it so hard?
Couldn't you just be mine?
Kiss me one last time,
and learn to say good-bye.
Because nothing you imply,
Will ever change my mind.
It's sad i still loving you,
But it'd be lamer if i take you back.
How come we killed eachother so bad?
I don't wanna hurt you, you know that.
And even if i die of love,
I'll never trust you anymore.
I was betrayed, you know.
And if i could turn back time,
I'll say one last line...
"don't betray me,
and break me so bad"
I've never cried so hard,
drained my tears inside.
I guess it was all lies.
Let's forget our beautiful last time,
let's forget the touch in out hands,
the taste in our lips, the bleed in our hearts.
I believe I'm doing right,
And I'm sorry, thats how I am.
I never give a second chance.
Congratulations, you made yourself a man.
That cheats, that lies, that tears appart
and you will never change that.
I'll start a new life without you at all.
Be friends? NO.
I'll just fake we ever met,
I'll just fake I don't love you.
Fake Heaven that's become hell, cuz of you.
I love you (again), and thats sad.
And I'll regret it all the time.
Bye angel of my side,
If you ever were mine.
I'll miss you as I'll miss to breathe.
And I'll cry as you can believe.
I will never forget you and me.
I will never love anyone like this.
Author notes
It's a sad story.... about me and my EX.
A contest entry
- FEELINGS by Liquid memories.
525 points, ended October 8, 2007, 35 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - (*~(~*~(~*~(~*~(~*~(PRE-WRITES OK!!!!....SOMETHING SAD...MAKE ME CRY!....NOTHING GROSS.. NO CUTTING OR MUTILATION POEMS! CAN BE LOVE,SADNESS,LONELY,DEATH,DEATH OF A PET ETC~*~)~*~)~*~)~*~)~*)~*~()~* by xxlisajazminexx.
425 points, ended October 4, 2007, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For Poets With 3 Trophys Or Less- Prewrites Allowed by Mercury Rising.
450 points, ended October 11, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I WANT LOVE!!!!!! by Breaking Inside.
450 points, ended November 9, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emotions. by lilblueeyesmine1978.
450 points, ended December 24, 2007, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
Comments
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wow this has so much emotion that it needs it's own box of tissue thanks for shring and good luck in the contest.
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this was wonderful
I can really relate
and I can also feel you pain
very well done
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thanks alot!
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ohhh my God.... I love it.. I have been there too... great write..
I will never forget you and me.
I will never love anyone like this
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thank you VERY MUCH!! im glad people can relate to what i write
thanks again 
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wow this is good.... i loved it... great heartfet, and heartjerking write!!! good luck in my contest!!!
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thank you very much!!!!!
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Very sad and deep, sorry for your low feelings of loss. Hang in there it does get better. One thing I have learned in life is that you can't go back...move on and find a great life. There is someone out there for you.
This is heart felt but a bit wordy and long, repetitive. Just a suggestion, but I would cut it down a bit.Thank you for entering!
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this is a very good poem... its kinda long and it kind of repeats in spots but it really is a good poem and i really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for entering my contest and keep up the good work. God bless.
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thank you so much for commenting :] I appreciate the advices. but I wonder where's that i repeat? I want to improve.
Thanks again.
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Another very sad and emotionally ouching poem. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering this excellent piece that was obviously written from the heart.
Mercury Rising
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This is so very sad
Beautiful mistake a perfect title than the first line My beautiful mistake my beautiful lie than the last line I will never love anyone like this! Wow I could really relate to all the different emotions on this poem and excellent write. Beautiful job, you deserve many more trophys on this one and I wish you luck. Hey thank you for sharing your gift to write beautiful poetry. Kelle Marie, stavykm
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Thank you so much for this comment that brightened my day. This is one of my favorite poems I've written, I wrote it while crying. It's nice sharing emotions with people that can relate, cuz you feel they can understand what you went through. Thanks again!
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FAB
Why is it that whenever relationships go wrong for me I manage to read stuff like this, thats so good?! Its the same with music, I downloaded this whole new album and all of it I can relate to. I just split up with my ex, mutually (a "break"), but after going out for a whole year she's already with someone else. I understand what it feels to be torn apart, destroyed, and left alone...by the one person you thought you could rely on the most. Such a sad poem, I paused my music while reading it and haven't been amazed by a poem as much as this in ages. An amazing write, really special.
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Thanks Alot
This poem means so much to me, kits one if the bests ive written, and the one i cried while writing. I dont know whats wrong with relationships, but it sucks when someone you love. betrays u, or just forgets about you like if nothing had happened. Thank you for this comment. it brightened my day <3
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This is a fab write that I can relate so well to. Best of luck in the contest.
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thanks for the comment!!! its always a good thing people can relate.
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damn... I know just how you feel
My ex was the love of my life.....
you show true passion in this write .....
your feelings are clearly expressed with each line to the next......
its hard to stop loving someone when your heart still does......
no matter what they did or said you still have this acheing for them and miss them so.....
you wrote this wonderfully
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thank you so much for entering this beautiful poem into my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you again
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thanks it really means to me that people can understand how i exactly felt while writing this. you got the entire idea!!!! and its good people can relate to it THANK YOUUUUU <3<3<3
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thanks for sharing.
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anytime
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Awh.
This is so sad.
I'm sorry sweetheart.
I hope things get better for you!
This is great
Thank you for entering!
xx
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thank youu
and yeah i loved ur contest. *flower*
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