He has returned I see him there,
with loving care beyond compare.
Thoughts of him and vision sweet,
nightly dreams he makes complete.
Quench your thirst and feel desire,
come let me set your soul on fire.
You are the breeze upon my cheek,
the beauty of the autumn peak.
Yes whisper softly in my ear,
so I may know that you are near.
I long for you in every way,
you came into my heart to stay.
Moments tender waltz in mind,
no greater love I shall not find.
I close my eyes the dance begins,
our worlds collide as love spins
No one will ever take your place,
when I see love I see your face.
In a list
A contest entry
- after making love with you... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended October 13, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Really lovely, I understand every word.
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No one will ever take your place,
when I see love I see your face.
you are touching the depth of the core here...Indeed a beautiful piece is here..thanks for the wonderful entry in this contest..
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This poem tugged at all my heart strings. It was so beautifully written, and the flow was stunning. The rhyming was beautiful as well, sometimes poets can compromise what they are trying to put on paper by worrying about the rhymes, and you conquered that task phenomenally! Fantastic write!
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excellent
Another tender a passionate heartfelt write. Full of the emotion for one speical person that is hard to come by and even harder to let go.
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This is a very sweet and tender write. The love and passion flows smoothly through each line. So much feeling and vivid imagery. I am in awe. Good luck in the contest.
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Aw, this is just lovely, Sandy, really good meter too. You always manage to convey so much feeling with your poems my friend, well done indeed,
good luck in the contest, (not that you'll need it)!
take care,
your pal wi' the sporran,
Alex.
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The aa,bb rhyme scheme works well with the final couplet. I like the "tender waltz". I like the implication of the final line that goes with the rest: "When I see love"-- seeing love in the world in all forms, "I see your face"-- he is the paradigm of love in the world in the 'autumn peak'and in the air. Souls wait for dreams that go beyond compare.
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magic
this was a truly powerful love poem, and I thought it was lovely.
Moments tender waltz in mind,
no greater love I shall not find.
these were beautiful lines, you really captured pure devotion and love.
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW Sandy your poems always make my heart feel the love you have in you
this one was beautiful Thank you my friend for sharing it gives my heart smiles this morning
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HI this creates a beautiful image..................... Yes this is da power of love .............simply magical..Thanks for sharing da thought.
LUV
SJ
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