Stripped of dignity, facing walls of despair
of all around me totally unaware.
Tears of disgrace flow from deep inside
burning this body as emotions collide.
Bruises of denial that eventually conquered me
despite my resistance and hearfelt pleas.
Staring blankly in front, the play rewinds in my head
for at this very moment I would rather be dead.
As darkness descends my mind suddenly breaks down
and within the abyss I fall, then proceed to drown.
For never again will trust bloom in my heart
as no longer of this would I wish to be a part
Author notes
OPTION # 4
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF 12 Entries x 12 Lines x 30 Minutes by intanglio2ring.
450 points, ended October 1, 2007, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark Passions by DrkPoet.
450 points, ended April 8, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 7 of 7
-
You did well my Friend
OMG u did so well i would like to congratulate you next time i see u (tomorrow)you shall be receiving a pat on the back
-
The reality of pain such as battered women, children etc. are often far more haunting than the darkest tales we weave to create horror. You did an excellent job with the portrayal of that in this write, and the picture went very well with it. Thanks for sharing it
-
Hoodwinked
I really like the poem and how you wrote it. It fit well with the picture. I felt so much pain and agony come through in the piece. -
Very Good, Very Dark
My heart goes out to the battered women. I know this happens more often than we think. We might think we are insulated from domestic violence, but it can happen to our children. Unfortunatly not every woman has a protective daddy.
Thank you for the comment on the good boy.
Good writing to you.
-
Broken and dejected!
Oooo! I really feel for your lady!
Wonderful pairing with the pic!
Thanks for a great entry!
Tang
-
I really like this one, i like the flow and rhyming used. And good job of capturing emotions
-
this was a strong write and beautifully taken from the picture
it was powerfull done and held alot of depth to it
well done and best of luck
Adding your comment:
1 - 7 of 7
