A simple shudder of hopelessness.
A simple task; forget the mess.
A simple promise-
regret taking my meds.
I want to feel today.
Not waking to numb dismay.
I was in love, falling free.
But you all of the sudden forgot about me.
There's a time; a place to cry.
But when you're alone with perfectfully nesissary intentions to die.
Whats a better time and place not to break down...
Stop to try; Don't wonder why.
The reasons show in red liquid gems.
A simple shudder of hopelessness.
A simple task; forget the mess.
A simple promise-
regret taking my meds.
I forgot numbers and faces.
The color of your GREY eyes.
Why must I lie.
Sink in denial.
Life's hallow and boys are vile.
Baby, take away my meds.
A contest entry
- Tell me you feelings!!! by fire angel.
300 points, ended November 13, 2007, 33 entries
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450 points, ended January 25, 2008, 10 entries
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I like this one too!
Often while reading your poems I feel almost as if I am reading one of mine. The words are different but the feel or emotion is always there. You love to make words flow regardless of content and to me that is what makes good poetry great! love to ya Nae! -
So deep and powerful here hunny, the pain, oh that waking moment, it's time again to face this sadness and loneliness that just can't fight away no matter how hard we try....
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nice
hey im not vile (even tho i dont know what it mean)
great poem and umm again im here if you ever need to talk
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