She reminds me of Aruba:
Her golden hair the miles of pristine beach sand,
Her eyes the crystal blue of the Caribbean,
Her face, her nose, her cheekbone, her smile:
The curves of an island attacked by--
Ravished by
Waves which are
My grateful arms surrounding her
My grateful lips tasting her
My grateful heart beating,
Beating a tempo,
In common time
With hers--
Free will withers
Before such blinding beauty
(Sure, this is sappy:
Sue me)
She reminds me of...
She is...
Home.
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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I loved this! Beautiful write! Fantastic imagery!
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and its lovely :)
beautiful write .
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This is perfect. It's the beautifully written poem that every girl dreams of Getting from her man. The imagery is outstanding!
I pictured every detail down to the last grain of sand and became intensely relaxed. Now that's amazing imagery if you can do that to your readers. Wonderfully written!
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This is beautiful... It's not your typical emo, 'I can't have her, so I slit my wrists' garbage, and I am quite impressed to note that there is still some quality poetry on this site. This is beautiful and tender, right to the last drop... Simply beautiful!
Love and light,
Laura
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This is something different from anything else I have found on the site. I have found some really good stuff, I have found some move along quickly there is nothing to see here stuff.
This interests me- I see people have picked up on the apologetic sappy line. It isn't apologetic though, is it; not for a poet. It is the job of a poet to show us the antithesis of ugly, the antithesis of dirt and the nastiness that generaly makes up life, and that is adequately covered by poets who were sick of sunsets. Sometimes it is good to be reminded of sunsets, poetically, especially the sunsets we can see from our own back yards, squinting through the crap.
It's a metaphor innit. Sappy would be throwing yourself on the ground as you got off the plane/boat/train/bus/donkey and kissing the dirt.
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Free will withers before such blithering beauty
I don't think it's all that sappy.
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Beautifull
of course all the guys will say it is sappy and the girlies beautifull he he had to really go through a couple of your poems before commeting, because I am not really into the DARK tipe of poems you like to write about mmmm actually I like exactly the opposite he he so, yes I quite enjoyed this one ;-)
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Sappy is true.... but interestingly written. I'm still gonna sue you for posting it though.
Monk
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Not sappy, touching and sweet. Your thoughts, your words, your emotions are penned excellently throughout. Gracious am I to you to have read a remarkable piece by you. -
Not sappy but beautiful. I love poetry that takes us into a personal view from the writer's stance. I especially love the second stanza. It truly shows your passion. Glad I ventured onto you page. This is indeed poetic. I had to chuckle at the list you have this in. LOL
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Home. Sappy but true, but then that's where love, and inspiration lay....I've know a few women I'd like to ravish like a wave - something out of Hawaii. I think (with limited understanding that) girls, and women, like sappy. And just a little truth...
I began by thinking it was all a little simple. But I liked the "sappy" bit, and the "home" bit home...It might not be roman candles, but the truth is like... -
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Masterfully crafted as usual. Gotta love a chick with a ravished island face...j/k. "She is... Home." Well done.
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The imagery is beautiful! I love how well it flows! The last stanza is by far my favorite. It seems so simple, but is deep and shows commitment! Loved it all around!
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Gio's got a girlfriend.
Ahem (I'll go cry now)
Seriously, though
this is beautiful.
Makes me wish my hair was golden
Simply because it has to be nice to have someone care enough to write something so beautiful for you.
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Um... read the list's title carefully.
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....off to dye my hair......
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lmao, I love the title of that list. Silly shit.
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