Violent Nights.
Flighty menacing display
revealing lazily at first
Patience for
the eye to perform
The vulgarian within
this firing, booming whirlwind
Is hazardous and rash
while still precisely creating
rare sights
Bemusing the consciousness
as strong while stunning
mysterious colours flourish
Sheeting merciful liquid
craved from the core
Permeates and rations
sometimes oppressively
continually raising
Trying thoroughly to replenish
respecting the mother earth
Shivering, locked therein
Waiting for
The Storm
To Pass
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Another beauty Cin....can see why you like this sooo much....great job..
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Yep this one by far is my fav..even now reding again, im in love with the words lol, my own words captivate me...what more could I sk for hahahahaha
Thanks Rob
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Unsure about the punctuation in this piece - the overload at end makes the missing is all else very noticeable in the breath spacing. The word choice is good but I feel line 10 is overly long in comparison to others and te flow is a little disturbed from this.
Thanks for entering.
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hmmm yes it has been a whlie since I have seen this poem and truth be told it isn;t supposed to look like this etc etc...So I will be doing some tweaking/fixing, thank you
Cindy
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quite like this
the wording used is really good. very meaningful xx
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