A breath of a rose
where in time,
Petals rise,
Petals fall,
And touch all of us,
Through the dawn
where the seasons
mire in the fullness of the moon,
Whispers claim another heart,
Remember those fragrances
within spring,
Velvet times
where the soul celebrates
and touches youth and life.
June 1, 1999
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Written January 21st, 2002
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The wonder of poetry is how it can be wonderful poetry in so many forms. In-your-face..metaphoric...or classically beautiful and yet able to allow the reader to internalize the words in their own way.
My internalization of this was both the metaphor...living and dying, and my own vision of loving and celebrating that love everyday.
Very lovely no matter how you might read this.
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I especially love the phrase velvet times, it is so interesting. This is a beautiful poem and I truly enjoyed reading it. You are really talented, keep it up!
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A nicely written poem, it seems each line is more meaningful than the last, very imaginative as well as entertaining
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enchanting!
A very mystical write filled with romance and longing of yesterdays. A time when love was fresh and the world seemed
a different place. Very poetic and eloquent. Delicate and sexy.
Mysterious and calming to the soul. Enchanting Great writing!
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A lovely write.
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the picture makes the message even clearer...though it was as close to perfect as i think you can get...great poem you have here!
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Lovely
I can tell this is a personal poem (correct me if I am wrong)The picture suits it perfectly and the way you wrote was both soothing and sad. Thanks for sharing. I, myself, enjoyed it. Keep it up! -
Beautiful
I think the picture works really well.. a sensual work. I like this one a lot x -
I like this poem because of the pictures that it sows, I'm not sure about the picture that you choose to put to it, it kinda goes with the sense of life, but I don't really think it compliments the poem. The poem is beautiful.
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I don't think the picture really did the poem any credit, it was a beautiful, flowing write. xox
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It is just a beautiful sentiment to describe the nature and its communication with the life of the humanbeing too. The thought is so touchy and so effective that it has come up as the impact of the magaic too. The structure too contains the beauty of the poetry too. The flow of the write is very impressive and just to the point too. I really appreciate this work.prabhudayal khattar
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I disagree with above comments. I enjoyed the entire poem and felt that it did fit in. I cant imagine why someone would think otherwise but to each his own. I commend you, this is well written and very beautiful! Well done!
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I really like the picture. It goes so well with the poem. Bravo.
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I agree with the above statement, the beginning and end are strong, but the middle doesn't really fit with the rest of it. I really did like the start though. Sorry, I can't make a decent comment to save my life today.
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not bad
I liked the begining and the end - the middle lost me a bit.
is it a very personal experiance poem?
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