Little Red Riding Hood was more
than a proud, little girl;
as a determined college grad,
she was ready for the business world.
Marching into the woods
with Daddy's shotgun in hand,
there were some ready animals
to fulfill her master plan.
Trapped into captivity
were the Big Bad Wolf and Goldilock's three bears -
Lost was their freedom,
now taken into her permanent care.
New living arrangements
included rooms with a view,
as Little Red Riding Hood had now started...
Her very own Petting Zoo.
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Author notes
This humorous poem was for a contest where one was to rewrite the ending.
A contest entry
- Re-write a Fairytale by EmeraldDreams.
4000 points, ended November 11, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Haha! I do love that poem! Best one I have read in a while.
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very good
up beat and fun thank you
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Very Funny
Very creative & imaginative.
Well Done!
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Wow
Wow!! That's was very imaganitive and the way you combined the nursery rhymes was great. I really liked this poem you did a great job and it was very well written.
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I see alot of people chose this story to work with in the contest. I do really like your more modern version of it. It flows nicely and it was enjoyable to read as well. A great piece and good luck.
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Schools are places where we are taught how to comply and be useful in the structures and mechanisms of this illusion. This zoo where the free are behind bars, unable to determine at which side of the bars they should be, while the bars do not know whom they separate from whom. All the while the keeper of the zoo lurks at the confusion inside his domain, unaware of the fact that he is being watched as well. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
Chris
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I guess I only have one question: assuming Lil Red means this to be a money making venture, who is going to pay to PET a wolf and some bears? Pet Little Pigs, maybe. But wolves and bears…….she may have to revise her plan.
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this is cute
this is cute and a interesting take on little red riding hood.what a neat idea changing a fairy tale i should check out the contest just to read the poems.real good job.
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AMAZING
This is such a beautiful amazing poem! I love it!! So many powerful words used, and used i so many ways, very creative and its almost as if you could feel every emotion, every feeling, every thought, as if it was happening to me, as if it was about me!! Very beautifully written as well, it almost seems as if it was flowing beautifully!! and very excellent!! I wouldnt change a thing on this it is too good! Very beautiful!!
Kit
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I don't understand this. Is it satire? Humour? Not the latter anyway. And how would the use of a shotgun enable one to capture animals (unless they were badly wounded first).
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This certainly had promise
It's a great concept but it suffers from mediocre mechanics--slant rhyme (girl/world, hand/plan), inversions (L11-12), and clumsy use of adjectives, ie. "ready animals". I don't think anyone ever stops by a farmyard and points at "ready animals".
A rather major rework could make this a very smart read, however, and I would encourage you to work with it further.
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Really good. I like your style. The idea was too good. This is very unique too. It is not too long and hence captures the readers attention. It is not exactly rhyming but while reading it there is a very good flow.
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Very unique concept, I loved it! I love fractured fairy tales and such. I appreciate the humor.
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Well, capturing those poor little souls that I so cherish from my childhood fairy tales, best be gone to this petting zoo lest you end thier very existance with your daddy's very own shotgun.
I like it, I like it so.
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You definetly re-wrote a fairytale with this. Very well done.
A bit of scary and a bit of funny/humor. Love that both are included within the words.
Great Job
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I liked it. It really made me laugh how well you twisted the story.
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haha this is cute. I like it. you did a good job writing this. too bad you didn't win anything... I believe it deserved the gold! keep up your amazing work!
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Love it! Kind of scary but funny. The poem has a feeling of satire to it with the whole grown up and revenge plot to Little Red Riding Hood. I enjoyed it very much. Perhaps the wolf will think twice before it tries to eat someone again, eh?
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Excellent rewrite, flowed so ell, and had a positive spin also.
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