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When Life Change's For the Better

Sitting, waiting
wondering when
my life's gonna change,
barely breathing,
afraid I'll miss it,
the moment
happiness comes home,
when misery is gone

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  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    September 30, 2007

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    This is really good, and I love that you are showing signs of light and brightness....hold your head up!!!
    I love you and believe in you and don't forget that!!!

  • Eots
    September 30, 2007

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    Good job... I think, however the end was inconclusive... I mean it WAS conclusive... but it doesn't seem right... I would think about it a long time to come up with something else. Good job though! Keep it up!!!

    ~Asa of the Poets of Surrealism


  • Talking Toni gold member
    September 29, 2007

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    It Will Be ..........................

    over before you know it so don't wish it away. Happiness will find you when you are not looking for it out of no where will come this big beautiful surprise and you'll broadsided by it pleasantly though!!!I like the way you exxpressed yourself in this piece so much emotion in such few words!!! Great job and thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~


  • earthstar
    September 29, 2007

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    I love that because I am in that place. It going to be an adventure. Thank you for your kind comments. My dad was not there when I needed it. It just my dream. I was kick out when I was 15. Now I have my heavenly father who does it. Thank you for your feedback.