In cusp of hand
He holds my soul
as gentle as
most priceless gem.
A broken bird
no wings of flight
to rest awhile
revealing broken wings.
In knowledge of
my spiritual pain
He awaits in silence
I feel His breath.
In shame my soul
cries for forgiveness
from tarnished shell
deceit has grown.
As teardrops fall
my soul is cleansed
as path to follow
shines ahead.
The breeze of love
releases guilt
as grain of sand
begins new life.
Love lights up
giving freedom's wings
as aching heart
become's renewed.
In chasm of
new air to breathe
His will be done
from flight of bird.
Author notes
PROMPT: Feeling Love In Pearl To Cry
In a list
A contest entry
- Feeling Love In Pearl To Cry...PIF...2500 points by kaibab.
2500 points, ended September 30, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Athough this entrie poem is just amazingly beautiful dear, that last stanza
is just so powerful for me right now and I have sat here now for about ten minutes
just reading it over and over again. Each time I have read it something different has come to mind for me, a different trial, a different blessing, each time something new. I think I wrote it on one of the previous poems I just read, maybe not, heck I can't remember, my mind is frazzled. But poetry is a powerful tool and has a way of bringing resources to the mind that otherwise might never
be tapped into and I think God places people and things in our paths as well at just precisely the appropriate time that we need them. I think you were placed in my path for a reason. Had you not entered my contest I would not have read your entry when I did, the domino effect that transpired from that would not have then taken place and I would not have ended up here. Here is exactly where
I was meant to be. This was the poem that I was meant to read at precisely this minute. ( well a few minutes ago over and over again until I started typing this)
You see I needed some clarity, something to help me figure out how to get through what is going on in my life. It took that last stanza to remind me of what
I had already been through and the rewards that followed. For every trial we suffer in life God rewards us handsomely for holding onto our faith and believing that His will be done and that He will get us through it. Sometimes we are so caught up in what is going on that we forget that... which was what was happening to me!
I am going to take a few minutes for prayer and then continue with your list, but
wanted to take a moment to thank you. You didn't have to go to the extent that you had for me. You are a blessing and I thank you from the bottom of my heart!
Suzi
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hoodwinked
This is a beautifully written poem. This stanza was my favorite. "As teardrops fall
my soul is cleansed
as path to follow
shines ahead.
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Beat repeat's my sound of stone
in waves to wash around bent bone,
awakening light to pearly gait,
my hooves to dance in thunder's wait...
thanks much for entering
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Your imagery tells so well the story of guilt, redemption and freedom. How beautifully done. I really like the way you used several diverse images as strands throughout your poem to bring your message across. It's like flashes of intuition in the mind that are brought together in understanding to reveal an awesome truth.
"as grain of sand/begins new life" - deep and beautiful!
This piece has a great flow and rhythm to it as well.
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hey thanx for ur comment on my poem perfect ^^ and i really love this poem of urs its beautiful
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a beautiful take on the prompt and you gave it such a depth and emotion
i loved it well done and best of luck
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Very spiritual and very welll crafted it speaks well
and tells all, wishing you the very best within this contest.
Blessings,
Frozentearz
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