For fifteen
I think Im pretty awesome
Being raised by my mom
Who drinks to much
And my step- dad
Who hates me
For being fifteen
And handiling life
Of course I have my days
When I miss my dad
Miss the worst thing
The thing that hurt me most in life
For fifteen
I have the boy I wanna spend the rest of my life with
Who treats me [almost] perfect
Who loves me unconditionaly
Even when I'm [very]bitchy
For fifteen
I have my best friend
Who I love more then anyone
Who is there for me always
And always knows what to say
When something isnt ok
For fifteen
I found the career I want
I found the college to!
And sometimes have my doubts
But always get back on track
For fifteen
I have my silly fights
I have my moments
When I wish the world would let me be
But thankful for when they dont
For fifteen
I get depressed
Really easily
Sometimes I feel like all hope is gone
Sometimes I wish life would go on with out me
For fifteen
I have my heros
Ginny
Martin
They help me look inside
They make me strong <3
I love you guys
Author notes
pine trees on a mountaintop
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this is lovely...i miss the days when i was 15...on year later...16 and idk lol
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this is a great poem! loved it!
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I'm 15 too...and my life is just falling apart... This is a great poem =)
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For Fifteen
you've penned a nice work here. No..I take that back...a nice work in and of itself regardless of your age and for those of us who are much more mature (ok..56..but more mature sounds better than older..ok?) it's kinda nice looking back and seeing the world through the eyes if a fifteen year old. Nicely done...
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I'm sorry but this poem isn't very romantic. If you want me to comment on it later message me.
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written with such love and hope
its such a beautiful thing to have people in your life who you love and who love you in return.... it always makes the days easier and the nights shorter.....
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thank you so much for entering this beautiful poem into my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you again
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I like the hope presented at the end. However, an asterisk doesn't make something not a cuss word, (last line third stanza) and there's a typo in the fifth stanza ("fount" should be found). Change those things and good luck in my contest!
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oo I already commented on this
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Ive been through pretty much the same thing.
Things will get better. (i know that sounds lame, but they will)
huggles
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Spelling error in the fifth I think with the word "carrer" it should be "career"
this shows how yuor matured in your mentality stong for 15. This was sad seeing all those things you go through. I enjoyed this. I really dwell into your feelings. It spoke clear in this beautiful write. The paintg was lovely.
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"I think Im pretty awesome" - "Im" would be "I'm".
"Who drinks to much" - "to" would be "too".
"And handiling life" - "handiling" would be "handling".
"Who loves me unconditionaly" - "unconditionaly" would be "unconditionally".
"Even when I'm [very] B*tchy" - "B*tchy" would be "bitchy". No need to cap it, and no need for the asterisk on this website.
"When something isnt ok" - "isnt" would be "isn't".
"I found the carrer I want" - it took me a minute to figure out "carrer", I thought you meant "car" but I think you mean "career".
"I fount the college to!" - "fount" would be "found", as you wrote in the previous line.
"But thankful for when they dont" - "dont" would be "don't".
"Sometimes I wish life would go on with out me" - "with out" would be "without".
"I have my heros" - "heros" would be "heroes".
The "< 3" thing,at the end, isn't needed.
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