Evening sky unfurls
its eon crafted celestial splendor,
silvery sparkle stuns its shimmer
with darting poignant pinpricks,
conjuring
an intense incandescent infusion
of cosmic ageless eloquence,
exposed in manifested
mercurial mirages
prodding deep into cerebral layers.
Twinkle paradoxes strobe
in acquiesced awakening,
inner seer rises to possess plasma security,
surrendering conscious
to the wisps of paranoia's miasma,
until it grows sanguine and serene.
Transcendence sagacious orb
intuitively summoned,
descends upon the vibrant rays of revealing,
as it floats upon the mind's lucid sea.
Night becomes an illumined tale
shining brighter than noon.
A contest entry
- Celestial Orb by amaranthine lover.
300 points, ended October 12, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a bloody, fantastic piece dude!
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Thank you so much for the great comment.
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Very well done and crafted with an ease of flowing silk from the tongue. Capturing well the intense presence the image provokes.
Best to you int he contest.
Mouser
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Wow. There is some heavy duty alliteration going on here which I just love, and so adds to the ethereal feel of this verse. Wonderful work - as I have come to expect from pen.
"Transcendence sagacious orb
intuitively summoned,
descends upon the vibrant rays of revealing,
as it floats upon the mind's lucid sea."
This stanza is simply brilliant - vibrant rays of revealing - masterful.
Truly an impressive piece. ~Pamela
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Beautifully penned and some wonderful alliteration throughout. A most inspired piece
All the best with this.
Gaylene
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Most EXCELLENT!!!
I wish you the very best of luck in this contest...excellent writing! -
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