Patchwork skies tease horizons
of hollow stones.
Shutters drawn to keep out
kisses of astral delight.
Deny the celestial paramour
your grace,
too absorbed to notice
the world dances without it.
A contest entry
- I myself am Heaven and Hell by Aesthete.
1000 points, ended October 5, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I thought this was very, very impressing. The imagery and descriptions are lovely, and for it being so short, I liked it a lot. It was resfreshing to see someone who's not afraid to use "big words"
Congrats on the honorable mention, also 
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all i can sat is peacful
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Quite lovely, thank you for this. I think my favorite lines were
Patchwork skies tease horizons
Of hollows stones
Just curious though, which piece was it that you saw? -
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"Gorgeous horrors of a dreamland" it was my favourite, by far. It made my brain feel carbonated with ideas. XD
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carbonated with ideas :] I like that. And Im glad you liked the pastel. Have a good night
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A touch of mystery and a great mind for poetic indulgences
I enjoyed your poem thoroughly. I couldn't tell of you meant the word shudders to be shutters, or that it was a play on both. You make me question the passing phases of time that walk soldierly without the childish ponderings that so savegely miss its beauty. Well done. -
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Haha wow. I didn't even notice the shutters thing, and yes it was supposed to be "shutters." Thanks for pointing that out, though I suppose it worked either way!
And thanks for the comment. I haven't written in awhile so I'm kind of getting back into the groove of things, trying to kick my muse into action. It's relieving to know that people are liking the poems though!
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