Autumn wind
mixed with stars
cinders and smoke
A contest entry
- Haiku Overnight #4 by azure85.
600 points, ended September 29, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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CONJURES OKLAHOMA FALL!
i use to live on a farm for thirteen years and this reminds me of campfires i built to cook our meals and sit around to watch "the caveman's television"! well-crafted...!
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Perfect
This is worth the Gold Trophy and then some. it is so flawless and beautifully painted with wording that really made this Haiku stand out I really loved the enrichened beauty of it all. keep up the very good work
and congrays on gold as you deserved it
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I love autumn, and this poem (although simplistic) captures it beautifully. We all love bonfires when the seasons start to change, the fire mixes so well with the seasons colors! Stunning haiku!
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I love the Autumn bonfires...there is something restful about the curling smoke of damp leaves. Loved this as it left lasting impressions
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Very nice haiku, with a good set of images that are very vivid to the reader. The city effect on it, in your L3, is an excellent AHA moment. Thank you so much for your haiku.
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lovely pivot ... where the wind and cinders mix with stars...that a breeze has come in suddenly taking the cinders and smoke of a fire (from a hearth or perhaps something more ominous) up to the skies ... i think from a hearth, due to the stars and that peaceful feeling they provide me ... nicely done >>> Gina
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This is a great haiku. Makes me glad I added you as a favorite! Good luck in the contest!
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