lightly stroking from shoulder to hip
hands gliding past tight nipples, pinching
slowly exploring soft warmth, hard muscle
an erotic journey of fascination
longing to reach my destination as
teasing fingers make you rise to meet me
standing strong and proud before me
your beauty makes me sigh
I so want to make this last forever
slowly sliding my lips around you
luscious licking strokes of my tongue
let pleasure overtake you
passion you can't control
exploring every glorious inch of you
I sense your need for me grow so strong
when I feel you swell and harden even more
how heavenly it is...filling me with your fire
feeling every tremor running through you
now I know how close you are...almost there
with fingers tangled in my hair you moan
an explosive shudder from you quenches my thirst
to taste and swallow every burning drop
now it's my turn...
lay me down across the bed my sweet lover
I want you to excite me make my juices flow
hold me forever on the edge of ecstasy
tease me all night long until I beg for you to stop
before you plunge inside and claim your molten prize
fingers dancing over me in that sexy way you have
reaching warm and secret places, make me throb for you
every thing you do is magic...turn me on
flick your tongue across my aching pearl
caress my nipples, grip my hips
taste and drink of me at your leisure
then kiss my lips and share with me the sweetness
make me moan and call your name
slide inside this wetness that demands you
velvet muscles clench and hold you deep inside
frantic thrusts to fill my need
fireworks exploding as you rock my world
Author notes
Option #2
In a list
A contest entry
- Ladies Only Picture Prompt Adult 18+ by Riftkin.
600 points, ended October 10, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me go "ooh!!"...(Adults Only)-Prewrites Welcome! by Daizy21.
450 points, ended October 13, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The bundle of options in here will suprise you.......... by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
400 points, ended October 21, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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WOW
This is a great write...
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Thank you Aaron, I'm glad that you liked it
Love Margaret
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Now thats hot, it got my juices goin lol, great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Wow'ed.
I felt a real connection between your thoughts and the body language used during your "adventure" ;)
I actually recalled times from my own experiences and remembered familiar feelings and emotions from my "adventures"
Captured the essence wonderfully.Your trophies are well deserved indeed.
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I loved the poem but I feel a little punctuation might help the reader. The poem didnt seem to stop and let the reader breathe to appreciate the wording and imagery.
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oh my...Im even turned on. geez...wooh, well you def. got your point across. Great descriptive write...
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wow
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Very nice images i cant get out of my head......
time for a shower
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wow
Very descriptive, i LOVED IT!!! -
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I whole-heartly loved this poem Keep writing, very well written poem oxox <333 Amber
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Cold Shower Now Neccessary!
Wow....That is extremely hot! You did an amazing job! -
holy molie
I thought I rolled over and went to sleep in the middle there. But then it was your turn. Smokin hot poem. I think I need to get out more...
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Ah, this is an excellently sensual poem. Well done.
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i love this poe
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Wow... congratulations on the trophies... they were very well deserved... sensuality at its best wonderful write... I loved the ending, it was perfection
Keep writing
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I love the lines you used in this poem. "Hold me forever to the edge of ecstasy" very nice! Sensual and raw. This blew me away! great write
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wow, that's pretty hot. great write. Great imagery. Very sensual. Thank you for sharing this.
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Very Sensual, love the references to oral sex. Correction I'm inspired by the diction presented in this work. It's imagery is vivid and bold.
your beauty makes me sigh
I so want to make this last forever
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I'm not surprised you won gold with this poem. Really well written, excellent rhythm - should I be mentioning rhythm here
- and very vivid imagery. Intensely erotic with no suggestion of sleazy smut.
A good choice of words were used to make this poem so full of images and erotic.
Great piece oof work!
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Congrats on the gold and silver trophies. The sensuality in this was outstanding and the imagery was so vivid and beautiful. Though I am more of a fan of rhyming, this was so well written I didn't mind at all.
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Well, someone had a good time lately! Great discription of the world of love making. I felt like a fly on the wall. Love is wonderful like this...thanks for sharing
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A great piece about oral sex and written well as though it simply flowed out of the tip of your pen. Happy trails
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Holy Hannah!!!!
I'm thinking I may have to go smoke a cigarette after that. Whew, better than anything I have ever seen in any of the mags. Hot, Hot, Hot.
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WHOA NELLY
This is perhaps the best free verse thing I have ever read in my life. I can honestly see how you got a silver and a gold trophy, This is awesome and I cannot think of a single thing or add-on to make it any better. It shouts the message it wants to get across very loudly and quite clear lol. I seriously think this should be in one of those Sexual Lessons Books and I'm not kidding...I could see it in one of those. Very powerful indeed. Great write I'm giving 3 applauds would give more but there's a limit
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an erotic journey of fascination
longing to reach my destination...
ooo i so love interactive..... deesire your open words place the reader to fire indeed, internal combustion to please, alike a harp of beauty in natures animal chord, and the moons stillness in exctacy
and so given the tide i thank you
and pass a scub
-jas
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WOW..THAT WAS GOOD
My favorite lines....taste and drink of me at your leisure
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So wonderfully and beautifully sensual and seductive!
Awesomely passionate and just very well written
Stirs the passion, for sure
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There is no vulgarity despite its being erotic....Your words are well chosen...You have presented something so commendable, my dear!
Galaxy2
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I can'c comment, I'm t busy ctahcing my breath
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Okay, thats better lol
OMG OMG that ws one of the best peoms I have read describing what is is describing. And so well too
I enjoyed that read, almost to much
Hehehehe
Thank you so much and all the best of luck
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Stunning!Thank you for entering!!!
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this one is oh so hot dearest
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Thank you sweetness and a big thank you for the pretty Gold trophy
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hummmm wow... I really liked this piece. THe passion from one line to the next only grew with such intensity, I liked it when he was done it was your turn. And then you turned up the heat even more.. You really are a great writter.... and I think you will see gold once this contest is over
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This is such a sensuous, erotic write 
Well penned indeed, and I wish you the best of luck in this contest...not that you need it. I reckon it's Gold for sure 
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