~*~
Lettered parchment,
Cascading from a cliff.
Notes of love and sorrow,
Forever Forgotten.
My mind is lost to me—
It is void of thought.
The clouds wrap around me,
Darkness Descending.
Transformed from oil,
Dry water cakes my throat.
I am lost, and I am without.
Repeated Ruptures.
I must leave this place—
These grounds of shaky hills,
For they only remind me.
Noxious Nevermore.
My hands are bound,
And my feet are tied,
I am trapped within my walls.
Insanity’s Imprison.
My arms remain unmoving,
As do my thoughts.
An eerie knock abounds.
Rebellious Refuge.
“Hello, sir,” comes the call.
“A fine evening, is it not?”
And I am without an answer.
Subtle Starring.
A needle is produced,
And I feel my head pulled back.
A tingle of happiness and pain—
Forever Forgotten.
~*~
A contest entry
- All Time Favorite! by Mezclita.
600 points, ended October 13, 2007, 40 entries
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wow very nice, I especially liked the way you ended all your stanzas with two words starting with the same letter, very nice effect.
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This is a unique piece of darkness, residing within. Well thought lines to provoke the mind. Great write. Thank you for the entry!
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wow this poem really cought my attention, it kept me reading and that is a good thing. Good job on this piece, I very much enjoyed the read oh so well. Keep up the good work such like this piece. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
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I like the way you repeat the begining in the very last line... quite effective in your message. Nice form too... one question though... so have you finally "left" yet considering this is based on a true story? Either way, thank you for your entry!
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....Oh my goodness dear.
I am almost in tears.
This was so fantastic, yet so sad. The emotions were just packed in there, Andrew. Amazing.
I love your structure. It seems all of your poems have amazing structures and ideas....original and great.
Your poetry reminds me of another friend of mines. (Asfand).
And that's a huge compliment
GREAT job.
You're amazing!
xoxo
Tay
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Wow, that's really good.
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