deep
and black
silently sundering shelves
rainbow anemone dancing dangerously
predator and prey play
alert but flirtacious
parasite ensnaring fish
icy and stern
`ocean`
stern and icy fish
ensaring parasite
flirtacious but alert
play prey and predator dangerously
dancing rainbow anemone
shelves sundering
silently black and
deep
Author notes
Okay...this is my first shot at this, and I took a while trying out lines. I saw in your example you could move words very slightly in line placement to get a better effect. I hope this is what the contest called for.
A contest entry
- The Big 5-0.... (50th Contest, that is!) by Barbara.
850 points, ended September 30, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please tell me what this makes you feel
Comments
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this is nice
the short
crisp lines
are great
you did a wonderful job
Riftkin -
Nicely done
This makes a lot of sense when read both ways, although a little bit of punctuation could smooth out a few rough spots, and it doesn't have to be the same punctuation front to back(luckily, or else it would never work!)
Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest
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Wow this flows really well. I tried to do one of these palindrome poems, but I gave up.
I think you meant 'flirtatious'.
Good luck in the contest.
DancingRed.
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beautiful!
actually, sublime
including the danger
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Nice-Write
Definitely Different, and I Liked It Much!! Very Explicitly-Written..An Enjoyable read...'God Bless'...Love, Shirley ann shaw-raytown,mo....
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