Rain falls
It cleans the earth
And renews us all
The plants grow
So does my hope
So rain fall on me
Wash away my troubles
Like the rivers flow to the sea
Rain falls
I watch the rain fall
It sings to me
A love song
Oh rain, never go away
Stay and comfort me all day
Please tell me what you think
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Cleansing and Hopeful
...This write reminds me of Rain, Rain go away.
an antecedent to it, possibly.
Lady of Fate...
I will be back.
...you have a way with simplicity and a clean, streamlined
informal way about your writing. Well done. My only
criticism... try and add more metaphor and asimile.
You paint pictures well and these elements would further
improve the imagery. Overall... very well done.
...add me Fate!
you add me now!
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sweet
I like rains too. they are great , they make you feel more pure and refreshing.the flow is great as well as the expression. great job.
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This is beautiful, hopeful, cheerful and different. Though I have a similar poem to it.. It made me feel the need for rain, especially with all the heat now
I love how the rain sings you a love song, comforts you and cleanses you as it cleanses the earth. You know or closer inspection, I can say that you are the earth speaking.. Like you are talking in the third person but then shift to the first person; the earth asking for more comforting rain.
(could just be me )
I really enjoyed reading this
Nooni
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I Love rain.
No matter where you are
it Always leaves you refreshed -
Lovers
I love this poem. I watch the reain every time it does rain. its my favorite thing to do. "Rain falls, It cleans the eart and renews us all" thats my favorite line... Like in Noah and the Ark I belive gives us another chance at life.. Thanks for writing this. It made me happy. LoL. I do think you meant cleanses though...
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whoa this is a great poem. the flow and rhyme is soo nice
thanks for sharing
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I love the rain
I love the rain too, on bad days I say that God is crying for me, on good days I feel replenished and alive just like this poem suggests, beautifuly done.
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goooood
i like it.
good work.
comment back.
i like ur stuff.
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Rain washes the Brain...
The best example of simplicity, the perfect idea which been ultimately poured on the paper. The way it has been written is an positive point for your poems.
The best lines for me are
Rain falls
I watch the rain fall
It sings to me
A love song
Great work dear, just carry on..
Give your Best !!
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Great
I love you're poems they are amazing. -
nice
I like the whole concept
it was entertaining.
as for the write it self the structure was nice but the flow was a little sketchy -
Brilliant
Mel Mel, I really enjoyed this piece it has such a great messege and it flows so well. I am pleasently surprised with your poetic ablilities and I plan on reading more of your stuff soon. You're an amazing poetess
Well Done
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oh those rainy days when the earth is quenched... and if one is brave ...they let it fall while playing in the puddles!
yes memories with this make me smile!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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simly fantastic
i really like the flow of this poem it gives life to an old heart and refreshs my soul..thanks for such an awesome write
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I love the metaphor of rain and tears! Beautiful write!!
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