Waiting for November, my mind doesn’t have room for other thoughts,
hoping one day we’ll share every night, which is when I think about you most;
it's only a month, but I miss yesterday already, wanting you so badly I can feel it
sending shivers down my spine, in with every breath,
coursing through me, when I can still feel how my heart beat as yours slowed,
lips to forehead as my breasts rose and fell against your neck,
finger tips running over military hair, hands resting on your back, grips softening
as arms relaxed around my waist while you slept;
each minute forgetting the hour as the world dissolved behind our eyes,
and nothing could have been as secure as lying there together, savouring the moment
which knew a life worth keeping;
in love with you.
Author notes
- sca
A contest entry
- I Believe in Love by Star Shine.
450 points, ended October 9, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - One Whole Year by Death of the Author.
600 points, ended November 13, 2007, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Aww wow this is great, truly deserving of the Gold and something I can very much relate to. I am in a long distance relationship so only get to see my girl friend every so often. Its a lot better than it was, but its still hard being away from the one you love. Very nicely penned.
hoping one day we’ll share every night, which is when I think about you most;
That's a great line, you've summed Love up brilliantly. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering
Take care x
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Brilliant!!
So deserving of a gold! Best of luck in the contest! -
this is a good write. bravo.
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LOVABLE!!
I loved this piece, since it reminds me of someone I care, loved, and always love. He left too, but im not sure if I'm seeing him ever again. So thats why this poem touched me so much, It's beautiful.
And I wish I could dedicate this unique piece to him!
I loved the entire it from beggining to end.
Thanks for this wonderful and full of love poem The best of the lucks -
I feel that this poem expresses a deep love, although in its infancy, still deep and loving. Enjoyed reading this very much. Julie.
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This is lovely as-is, the emotion and longing are tangible, you let the reader feel the love.Well done.
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