Inhale the screams from his lips bleeding
Take all the passion you’ve been needing
Insanity watches in desperation as you crawl
Towards the last light worth living for
Kisses from demons are worth pure gold
But they turn into ashes when they are sold
Your home is with him in his solitary tomb
Covered in poisoned words of hope and doom
You will fall like angels from the past
Like a blackened holiness that can never last
He may have disappeared from this life
But you’ll see him in every reflection from every knife
Beautiful suffering
Mourn for the living and dance for the dead
And hang your agony on the thinnest thread
Enthralled in his beauty you forget your soul
Making you forever with him but never whole
Flames from the deepest circle have conjugated here
But since you are nearly gone feel no fear
He said once that strength is only for the weak
So that they forget their mind and start to speak
You will fall like angels from the past
Like a blackened holiness that can never last
He may have disappeared from this life
But you’ll see him in every reflection from every knife
Beautiful suffering
A peaceful moment is only equaled with pain
And will make all your happiness in vain
He is opening his arms for you to submit
And for the hearts of this world to split
You will fall like angels from the past
Like a blackened holiness that can never last
He may have disappeared from this life
But you’ll see him in every reflection from every knife
Beautiful suffering
Author notes
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Comments
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I really like the fourth stanza.......it has a nice flow and I really felt the duality of your words x
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This is a good write, and it does fit the picture. Nicely written and the rhytm and flow was weel put in this prose...thanx for entering, poet, and best of luck...
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Nice
This was a good write, although it sounds like it was written to be a song. It's still damn good though. Thanks for entering my contest! -
I can definitely see you talking about something like the devil. Not exactly him and all that goes with him, but something like that.
This is a very intriguing piece.
Nice job! -
what did you pick from my contest
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Yes, indeed. Fallen angels from the past, blackened holiness that cannot last......
Yes, also. Very true words, nice darkness to this one and appreciated on a higher level as it is supposed to be. This evilly dark beauty is bathing in pure blackness, and I love it !!!
I give it all I can..... 3 bunnies.
bye until,
HW702
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I love it.
This expresses so much emotions inside. I love dark poetry, I admire love poems, and I have a fetish for rhymes, and yours were meloic and prefectly beautiful.
I have two main favorite parts: the 3rth(which is repeated) and the 4th stanzas. They are great, they are pure poetic.
Thanks for entering this amazing write.
I wish you luck -
Mmm. COol poem I love the repeating lines because not everybody can do repeating lines and its description.nmoice.
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Enthralled in his beauty you forget your soul
How dangerous it is to become so consumed by another soul that you forfeit your own. I really enjoyed this direction you went. I do feel the rhyming was a bit trite in the beginning, just my opinion, but, it did level out. I liked the repeating lines, added poignancy to this piece. Well done. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you.
Bella
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