In pride's indolence
we choke,
lethargic and obtuse,
desensitised
to persecution
under obelisks
of aloof.
Flames of harmony
smothered
by ignorance,
surrounded within
contentments walls.
Inferno's
of forgotten dreams,
lick and taunt
our trivial attempts
of solid identity.
In shoes of indifference
we allow the fire
to exhale
hope.
Author notes
Prompt - Slow Burn
In a list
A contest entry
- Slow Burn by zochit2me.
625 points, ended September 28, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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very good read
but as you do know i do have an obsession with fire
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WOW! U know I like stuff like this dont you? you have to be gaylene...if nit sorry!! This is very powerful and has a stronger meaning then what meets the eye! I like the feel that this poem brings out! The refrence to flame just fits so well!!
these are my fav:
Inferno's
of forgotten dreams,
lick and taunt
our trivial attempts
of solid identity.
luv n peace
pri
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Very well put together my friend.
A good uplifting write.
In shoes of indifference
we allow the fire
to exhale
hope.
Wonderful finish!
Becky -
good prompt, great write. very well put together, good luck in the contest xx
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