poised for swift attack
camouflaged to paralyze
praying mantis glares
Author notes
Photo credit: http://animals.nationalgeographic.com/animals/wallpaper/praying-mantis_image.html
A contest entry
- Haiku, write of Insects or Birds by InBetweenThoughts by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended September 29, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Haikus! by Dlvvanzor.
300 points, ended October 15, 2007, 18 entries
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Please feel free to let me know what you think.
Comments
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good write! The picture adds to the haiku (maybe you should put at the end and have th reader scroll down to it so it won't give it away too soon??) I really liked the second line the most. Nicely put. Thanks for entering!!!
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Great haiku. Quirky and nicely penned
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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this one is awesome too. Praying mantis's are cool we had several here at the house thhis fall when we moved in good luck i suppose Cara
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Thank you so much, Cara.
I hope all is well with you. I'm in the middle of class, but I just wanted to say thanks for commenting on this haiku. It's one of my favorites. I hope your new year is starting out allright. I've got to get back to class. Don
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poised for swift attack
camoflauged to paralyze
praying mantis glares
Thank you for entering my ku contest. This creates a very nice image in my mind and the graphic you included just adds to the haiku. -
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Thank you very much, Pollycheck!
This is one of my personal favorite haiku. Don
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Great haiku which I liked a lot. It was quite hopeful. Congrats on the HM.
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Thanks for entering!
I wish you the best of luck.
I hope you had fun.
-Dlvvanzor (Like my haiku comment for the haiku contest? lol)
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Killerly Sweet
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!! I really love that picture ands the haiku wording for it. its so perfect and oh so beautiful that it made me cringe as if I were its prey it is about to take. so very detailed and beautifully done at that. excellent job and keep up the good work congrats on HM trophy you and your mantis deserved it
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I like this one. Praying mantis' are so cute in a way. Congratulations on HM. You captured the photo well in your words.
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Good morning Thank you for your Haiku. A wonderful picture you have painted, the imagery is great..beware the invisible is watching! Great form, flow and counts...best wishes, Ken IBT
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Boy if this doesn't remind me of our enemy, always in disquise of some sort to swiftly attack us. this is an awesome penning good luck in the contest.
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Thank you!
I'm so glad that you enjoyed this. I learn every time I write these haiku. I knew a little bit about praying mantises before, but I didn't know about how they literally paralyze their prey when they bite them on the back of the neck. It helped me to visualize this haiku. I love how the one in this photo almost looks like a leaf. They attack their prey before they even see it coming. I love how you interpreted this poem, putting so much more meaning to it then I had even thought of when I was writing it.
I haven't gotten around to looking up that website you gave me, but I will. I'm juggling my kids and school right now. I've got an online computer class, online accounting, and a paralegal class. I've also got to volunteer some hours this quarter for my paralegal class in Ethics. I'm ready to fall asleep, thinking about it.
Knight70
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Me and Thomasine found a huge praying mantis on holiday in Greece last year (i rescued it from the swimming pool haha) and it was so amazing, we've got some cool pictures of it too. Did you know the female bites the males head off when they mate? Sounds like a pretty bad deal to me!!
Great poem, you've captured the essence of a ruthless yet beautiful killer wonderfully. Well done, take care and good luck! x
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Thank you so much.
I'm so glad I'm not a praying mantis. I don't think I'd appreciate having my head bitten off. I wonder if there is relationship counseling for the praying mantis. I'm so glad that you enjoyed this haiku. Your mention of Greece brings back memories. When I was in the U.S. Navy, I got to visit Athens. It's so beautiful there. I'll bet those photos you have of the praying mantis in the pool are priceless.
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Hahaha! That's gold that is, counselling for praying mantis!!!
Ahh I have not been to Athens, though this October I am going back to Greece with Thomasine and her family
Take care x
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She looks pretty upset
at whoever took that picture.
Another masterfully written haiku, Dear Poet.
You take inspiration from God's creation
and touch on it with something inspiring of your own.
Well done!
~May the ink in your pen flow freely~
Chaos
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Thanks, Chaos.
I would hate to be the little butterfly that took this picture, then. I can just see it now. The praying mantis lunges in blazing attack, spiny legs sinking deep into gossamer wings, just before gnashing and thrashing on the little butterfly's neck.
A praying mantis then, of course, paralyzes the frantic butterfly. At that point, it's an all-she-can-eat buffet.
Knight70
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Oh yes I like this alot dear friend your haikus are better ever time I read them thank you for sharing and goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes and much love.
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Thank you, C.J.
This is the only haiku I've written like this so far. I really love it.
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Oh winged things..I love them
I really like this..I found a praying mantis just the other day...little guy was not happy with me at all!
Thanks for sharing
Peace
~A~
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Thank you so much.
A praying mantis is a feisty little green guy. They strike their pray with blazing speed, biting the back of their necks, paralyzing them. They'll go after mice, butterflies, and even after their lovers. I'd say they might have relationship issues.
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