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The Artisan and the Angel

She knows nothing of palettes
or of camel hair brushes,
yet every room she enters
she paints so beautiful
it brings forth murmured hushes.

Silhouettes and shadows too
does she know naught-
save they form or follow her
after all, vanity is a virtue,
or so she thought.

Such patient beauty
like a rainforest flower
waiting for the bee;
(Unashamed to bare all,
most intimate petals,
succulent buds reveal).

Though she is unaware

that patience
actually is a virtue,
still she waits.

Like a rainbow waits
for the sun, or the rain,
she waits knowing...
the artisan like nature,
will create once again.

She knows scarcely a thing
about shading, or shadows.
Grace has she 
like millions of flowers

that own spring meadows.

She waits for the painter who,
(watching a while now),
imagines only God could
bring forth such beauty-
(Even then he's not sure how).

And only the Devil below could
stray his eye from his hand
to imaginations carnal and beastly;
This certainly wasn't planned.

 

The master, his oils all mixed,
isn't sure how to go on-
This beauty so striking,
like a billion angels singing,
Heavens' most gorgeous Psalm.

Lust and desire haven't a place
where he's done this many times,
she poses, he has his way with her
like great poets make love
to words in comely rhymes.

Author notes


Simply about a beautiful woman waiting for the painter. The struggle of the painter between his passions of love (carnal) and painting.

~ Artwork Credit ~
"Waiting for the Painter 2"
by Stefan Hadiz-Nikolov

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  • toomysterious
    July 13, 2008

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    Absolutely beautiful, the metaphors and the imagery, the way it is all seamlessly woven together. A truly "golden" poem.


    • Grimoire
      July 25, 2008
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      Thank you. The last stanza is very ambiguous and open to interpretation, glad you enjoyed the write.

      until immolation,
      Grimoire


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    Many beautiful stanzas apply. Equally, others do not. All the same, thank you for an enjoyable entry.
    Best wishes and thank you for your entry.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.


  • adios muchachos gold member
    March 18, 2008

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    Grim

    I liked this. Didn't shut me out. Solid. You feeling, the painter feeling and model feeling as well. Can't get too much better than this one!

    JJ


  • Gwenevere
    March 8, 2008

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    What a beautiful poem.Like the artist, you paint the most perfect of pictures.His eye beholds the beauty whilst his heart beats to the tune of passion.This was well deserving of it's Golden trophy.Well done and good luck in the recent contest, Ros


  • Heart Bleeds
    March 8, 2008
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    its a beautiful poem. very good flow and really good theme.


  • Animarising
    March 8, 2008

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    This is a brilliant piece of work, I really felt it all the way. Lovely phrasing, shading and emotional connection.
    The only negative is those two beastly exclamation marks, yuk!

    Very well done.

    • Grimoire
      March 23, 2008
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      EDITED

      Ok. I took out the "beastly" exclamation marks... just for you. As for the rest of the punctuation... yeah, I will probably have to rework this one... but not right now, lol.

      until exhale,
      Grimoire


  • eleno
    March 8, 2008
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    hmm, well, i somehow didnt feel up with it. i dont know why.. well, anyway. thankyou. -eleno


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 8, 2008

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    It didn't quite do it for me - though obviously it did for the reviewers below, and for the person who gave you the wee yellow vase. I hope you do well in the other contest.


  • Oraculus
    March 8, 2008

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    MASTERLY WORK!!!

    First of all, this is a magnificent piece of art: great poetry! However, there is a weakness in the use of punctuations, and adjectives that maybe should be adverbs, which disturbs the otherwise near perfection of this wonderful poem. I'm sure the poet will understand my views, after having pondered the points. While there is truth to poetic length being distractive, I know, I'm a bit of a Windy Willy, there is nevertheless a need to express the entire thought in an interesting way, where each stanza pulls the readers eyes forward to the next: this poem does that just well; the key to Royal Poetry is rewriting work as many times as is required; DW


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    March 7, 2008

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    Exuberance controlled,
    to a point. What a grand
    description, ultimate conclusion!

    Superb!

    Aesthete


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 14, 2007
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    So deserving of the GOLD!!

    My God you did this so exequisitely well...it just absolutely stole our breaths to read it....we all have a lot to learn about focusing and sticking with it until
    it reaches absolute perfection. (sigh-sigh-sigh)
    Thank you for writing this flawlessly, real inspiration
    your writing is!!!! good good great gold trophy poem!!!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen : ))

  • tmgoebel
    November 14, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this poem. And what a perfect painting to be inspired by. I feel privileged two-fold. The good/evil, God/Satan, pure/erotic duality really sucked me in.


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 14, 2007

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    This is very different from what I have read from you...
    The metaphor and imagery going hand in hand to accent such endearing thoughts. Beauty; beheld by the eyes of creativity, and what can come of the longing that colors temptation's void. Great sense of detail, describing each 'stroke' of passion begging for play.
    The struggle within the mind, for pleasantries untamed. Well penned!


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    November 14, 2007

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    impressive, full of vitality.

    silouhettes = silhouettes

    I like the simile of the 'patient beauty' with the 'rainforest flower'.

    All through your poem, you use striking imagery, especially in nature with the flowers and rainbow. I feel lulled into a beautiful picture, where she waits....until the devil comes and the poem changes mood and feeling.

    Temptation seems to be the driving force 'to imaginations carnal and beastly', and he has his way with her. But I am unsure if that is sexually or artistically. That leaves me with a question to ponder and adds to the overall effect of your poem.

    I like it a lot. and poets do make love with words...as you say.

    Richard


  • Hearta
    October 26, 2007

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    scrumptious...



    i just recently watched the original Romeo n Juliet, now i'm swept away with love and strange lyrical verses..

    like i'm graced with here.. your poem paints a pretty picture and makes a moody girl feel... interesting..

    i like it a lot..

    hold fast to mystery and dream
    and look at life with a loving beam
    beauty rests in the eye of the artist
    clear your mind
    for nothing happens when you think the hardest .....

    i dunno.. just running w/it.. thanks for this.

    • Grimoire
      October 27, 2007
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      Thank you so much. I am glad I could make you feel....interesting. I think you must have read my page for that last line in your poem here speaks of something there. bye,
      ted


  • Mad Moon silver member
    October 18, 2007

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    SUPERBLY written! This takes one's breath away. Tjough I an not usually one for the longer poems, this one held me tight right to the beautiful ending! I can't begin to choose a favorite passage, line, or even a stanza. This is wonderful in its entirety! Sumptuous, sensual, and filled with longing. Gobs of vivid imagery. So much in this one! Very well done, my friend. Thanks so much for your entry, and Good Luck!

    • Grimoire
      October 21, 2007
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      Thank you. I didn't realize that it was as long as it is, you are right about length being a reason to turn off readers. I am glad that it was enticing enough not to dissuade you from reading it through. Thank you for your Kind comments, this picture prompt was an easy one for my muse, I guess............... ted


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 17, 2007
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    I am a bit miffed...I cannot believe this poem did not win a prize. I think this is one of the best I've read in a while...completely different from the first work I read of yours but just as...intriguing. Hmmmm, I might have to keep my eye on you.

    Love, Lane

    • Grimoire
      October 17, 2007
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      My point being simply this: Painters, poets, any creative person is passionate. Some eccentricly so, where the main passion being their "art". To have anything stunning enough to dissuade that passion, even if fleeting, is truly a rarity. Beauty, truth, love, sex............these are a few of those rarities , well, at least to me !!!


  • poetryality silver member
    October 17, 2007
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    Love those last two lines most especially. You have a way with words poet. There are gentle flowing metaphors written here and a seemingly well rounded knowledge of what "she" wants, what she tends to need to visit the colors of her lover. An excellent entry. Mary is going to have a time. LOL The best to you in the challenge.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee

  • anon167
    October 14, 2007

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    nice. this was not what i expected at all. you seem to see things in such a beautiful way. The poem is a celebration of beauty. shot through with religious imagery I was kinda waiting for satan to smash it all but like the positive tone


  • TXCowgirl
    October 11, 2007
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    Your muse certainly has been giving your poetic hand a workout. If I were you I wouldn't lose this muse. You have such a graceful way of explaining things that will captured the readers hearts, attention, and emotions and make them feel as if they are standing in the middle of what is unfolding, and I for one love that feeling.
    ~TXCowgirl


  • Mallig gold member
    October 7, 2007
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    This is a striking piece, admiration and restraint, then letting go... I really liked this a lot. The beginning really grabs hold of the reader: "She knows nothing of palettes,
    or of camel hair brushes.
    But every room she enters,
    does she paint so beautiful,
    it brings forth murmured hushes." Best of luck in the contest!


  • klassy lassy
    September 29, 2007
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    I think you perceive the heart of the artist well. who seems to want to claim the beauty within his vision as his own, and mark it forever.

    This poem catches the guiless beauty of innocence, also the brief glimpse, unerring recognition, of real beauty in a moment of etherea.

    You write beautifully, and I was lost in your canvas for a moment, too. ~ K


  • Touchof1der silver member
    September 28, 2007

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    This should do very well for the contest criteria. You have a great grasp on what she is looking for. Good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der

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