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Too Late for a Love Song

I cannot remember starting to love you
Not the day nor the time nor the place
But I remember the longing and how you never knew
Because I never said...and now it’s too late

Too late for a love song, though I have all the words
But your music has faded from me
Singing a duet alone is absurd
And I’m ready, at last, to fly free

The time of my devoted worship has flown
When I star-wrote your name on the sky
’Cause false gods must be toppled and childhood heroes outgrown
Why sing praises of those who don’t know I’m alive

Too late for a love song to that old melody
My heart’s lyric does not match the tune
The end of this round lies in tragedy
But you lie deaf inside your cocoon

Would you even have listened if I had said
What lay in my hopes, wishes and dreams?
But we both had our pride and that chance is now dead
It’s too late for this love to grow wings

Too late for a love song to be salvaged from grief
My voice has been broken and torn
The cicadas’ love song is all too brief
But their heartache, at least, reaps reward

You made my soul rise and my heart beat so fast
Like a dragonfly’s trembling wings
But love’s dead husk is thrown, with thoughts of you, to the past
I’m finally released…now a new song begins

Too late for a love song, so let’s start something new
Our friendship could last ’til Heaven’s gate
Fresh song sheet in hand, I steal a last look at you
And I realise...it’s never too late

Author notes

This is about the regret of knowing a love cannot be and the haunting idea that if I'd done things differently it could, maybe, have worked. The dream that, one day, it might.

This poem was inspired by the following lyrics from ‘Dragonfly’ by The Cruxshadows

And I will write her name and cast it to the sky
As precious moments will slip away in time
Angels fall from grace, and sometimes heroes die
But tonight, my love, ascend the gates,
Release the dragonfly

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Another song which influenced this poem was ‘Almost a Love Song’ by Leslie Bricusse, Henry Mancini and Frank Wildhorn

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 16, 2008

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    This is so sad, a love that could've been, but never was. I guess we all gag on our words when feelings come into light, because feelings render us powerless, confused and not ourselves. The first stanza spoke the most to me, because it's exactly what the whole piece is about and more. Nicely done.


  • Tarja
    February 8, 2008

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    Congrats on the gold and silver trophy... this really was so emotional and well written... I enjoyed it very much. Keep up the great work, good luck.


  • kvwriter silver member
    January 25, 2008

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    Very revealing. Love can bring us such joy that it cannot be measured and, yet, such pain too. And that can't be measured either. I suppose it's best to say, always what is on our minds, in our hearts/beings so we don't worry if it's been too late and don't question "What if?" So many need to read this. I know I did. Thank you for sharing a lesson I will, certainly heed. Be blessed.--Kel :

  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 22, 2008
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    Oh lost love, there really isn't much else worse than it. That need for someone, but you just can't say and before you know it is, their gone (it's too late) their far away.


  • GypsyEyes
    December 20, 2007

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    my friends have this problem. i wish they would just tell eachother. great job. i wish you good luck in my twin's contest.
    ~Dommi


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    December 16, 2007

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    Same thing happened to me. I might have really had something good going if me and my friend had just told each other how much he cared. Now he's with someone else and I love him to death and he doesn't care. Great poem that shows the emotions really good. Thanks for entering this into my contest.


  • jazz-cat
    November 21, 2007

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    i love this! its beautiful! my favorite stanza was the very last one. this would actually do well as a song, if you were able to put a good rhythm to it.

  • cirque du soleil
    November 7, 2007

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    this is so sad and haunting...you realy have a talent for songwriting and poetry...this would make a good song if it had a bridge and a chorus...my fave lines were..

    Too late for a love song, though I have all the words
    But your music has faded from me
    Singing a duet alone is absurd
    And I’m ready, at last, to fly free

    The time of my devoted worship has flown
    When I star-wrote your name on the sky
    ’Cause false gods must be toppled and childhood heroes outgrown
    Why sing praises of those who don’t know I’m alive


  • felixangel
    November 6, 2007
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    passion sweet sad you know how to write love poetry


  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 23, 2007
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    This is passionate, wanting to rekindle if possible. Thanks for your entry of it into my contest lol


  • Nyhte
    October 19, 2007

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    Bravo

    I could relate greatly to this poem, and it was an amazing write. Exactly what I was looking for, thank you for entering. It was an amazing write. And I wish you all the best in the contest.

    Personal: I have experienced this experience all to well, and the stanzas just captured my heartstrings, I truly am grateful that you chose to enter.

    Sin AKA Dreamer Of Shadows


  • Ilma
    October 19, 2007

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    Loved it, I can relate to it so maybe that's why.
    I love the way it seems so hopeless throughout, until the last line.
    A beautiful poem, good look in the contest =]

  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 13, 2007
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    Wow this is good, and to prove it you have the gold in hand,,,smile,,,it's too late for second opinions lol it's midnight and beyond, forgive me for my dull, dry humor, it's only my trademark

  • abba12
    October 2, 2007

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    i love this. particuarly your ongoing theme of it being too late from the line 'As precious moments will slip away in time'. you put subtle referance to the whole verse in your poem without it sounding arkward because you used the actual song in your poem, which is great. it flowed well, and i really enjoyed reading it. good work.

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