Recaptured rapture wreaks its
havok for today,
When your to weak to slice again
there's nothing left to say.
No one here can know my pain
I fear that I have gone insane.
Every day I face these scars,
a map of pain etched in mars.
To tired now, to even cry
to weak to wish that I would die.
I wish the world would go away
so I could rest for just one day.
Understand that you can't know
how hard it is to die so slow.
I've been bleeding far to long
I'll show you all that you were wrong.
Fuck you mom you left me here
and never have I shed a tear,
abandon me just like the rest
I guess I didn't pass your test.
I pray again that I could sleep-
defy the pain with mindless deep.
A contest entry
- Hate Me, Kill Me by thorlorn thanatos.
380 points, ended March 30, 2007, 102 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Beautiful.
Hatred for yourself caused by others... Prime example of what this contest is about...
Good luck in the contest
Ryan
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You capture emotions like fireflies in a mason jar...Home is where the heart is...Your writings have the most comfy living room for me...
Thank you for sharing!
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don't touch it!
Great write. I love the lines
Every day I face these scars,
a map of pain etched in mars.
that really is what scars are, reminders of pain, you can read them like a map, they never let you forget. Sometimes i think bleeding it out will help, but my scars say different...
Anyhows, great poem, I'm adding it to my fav ^_^ -
don't touch it!
Excellent poem! It shows a lot of your deepest emotions and feelings in this write. We all have scars we face in life. We just learn to deal and hopefully the scars go away or fade in time:) Super job on this poem! -
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This one hurts... very painful write, can really feel it. There's a few places where you need to change the 'to' ...to 'too' :-)
Powerful and intense poem, excellent write ! -
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Well put. I feel your pain.
Sam -
Amazing!
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powerful write....full of emotions!!!
much i enjoyed....
thankyou -
Pain and feelings run throughout this piece. Keep venting, keep writing. Head up/Stay strong. Thank you for sharing.
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