Her cold fingers are always searching
and her eyes are decorated with
urban stars
(I wonder when she will realize that
real stars are too far away
from her frozen hands?)
LXF
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written on september 25th
i havent written anything for....a month and a half?
thats why this is really bad
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Lives built on false hopes is what I see.
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Hood-Winked!
You are an amazing poet... and if you consider this one of your worse pieces then wow... I find this to be a breathtaking snapshot of society... in a beautifully poetic form - with nothing of the cliche that other pieces seem to rely on... wonderful
Keep writing
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This has nice imagery, a frozen being living beyond their means... possibly. A good write! Different format to what you have written in the past, but still in the same league, keep up the good work and don't give up!
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thank you so much for your comment!
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I love that. It's so thoughtful and unique... Plus the "urban stars" is the greatest image I've seen today.
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thanks so much for the comment!
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No, this not bad, this is an awesome write and poetical expression. Just follow your muse and amaze us with its beauty.
~Sonja~
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