Repetitions of sounds echoing
About the upcoming ball,
Naked pine trees standing tall.
Ladies disguised in beauty
Radiant dark putrid fear,
Wondering why I am here?
Our host turgid as steel
Steps behind the oak doors,
Rolling thunder, the rain pours.
Lightning wrote his name
Across the charcoal gray sky,
No more soft clouds floating by.
Alerted to his vile presence
Nature impulsive tempest changed,
All ladies were in his morbid range.
The mighty gale roared
A wave of his transparent hand,
Cold handsome; icy unnerving man.
His wicked steps waltzing smooth
Cutting a path across the dance floor,
past wilted flowers; through his garden door.
My warlock made me a promise
kisses would show me; mountain peaks
Swirling tongues left me frantic, weak.
A heart of pitch soared; ravishing my soul
in his arms I was a dove without wings,
Caught compromised, while my heart sings.
"Now take a look at me
the results of being
bold. I'm a replica
of his favorite
pet; he calls her
Fang"
Author notes
"what a masquerade ball"
A contest entry
- I WANT SOMETHING DARK AND SCARY AND FRIGHTENING by esroddo.
475 points, ended September 29, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very intriguing and dark write
You have captured some very interesting stance, brillant piece.
"His wicked steps waltzing smooth
Cutting a path across the dance floor,
past wilted flowers; through his garden door.
My warlock made me a promise
kisses would show me; mountain peaks
Swirling tongues left me frantic, weak.
A heart of pitch soared; ravishing my soul
in his arms I was a dove without wings,
Caught compromised, while my heart sings."
Thank you for entering and good luck.
LISA
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But I wasn't scared - but it impressed me with its use of words and imaginative development. An interesting and stimulating read
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Very vivid. Quite a night....
Good luck in this contest.
Lady D
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mwwhhhaa, great imagery! Best of luck, this was defo dark!
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