My invisible scars
are plain for anyone to see,
as I blindly journey on…
This path of Christianity.
Wanting deliberate faith
ready on my tongue,
I received God’s Salvation
when I was dumb and young.
Inflicted wounds to my soul
from a lack of understanding
have been healed by the Power
of Christ’s personal anointing.
I am worth dying for
according to His Word;
The Lamb’s wondrous sacrifice
had sin to Himself transferred.
Now my soul graciously sings
with overflowing joy!
For redemption has been granted
to this formerly, lost boy.
Learn more about me and my poetry at:
http://www.squidoo.com/book-isbn-1419650513/
A contest entry
- your soul by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended October 7, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 35 of 35
-
What wonderful knowledge to feel the power of our Saviour. No matter where we come from or where we are going, his arms are always there to comfort us and offer unconditional love. Thank you for sharing such beautiful words.
Soulful Woman
-
Shout to the lord Amen!
Great poem man I liked this part of the poem: My invisible scars
are plain for anyone to see,
as I blindly journey on…
This path of Christianity.
-
Oh, how it sings!
I can so relate to this poem...I only wish you elaborated upon the theme a bit more. Perhaps more imagery-the lost sheep, or the prodigal son, or Isaac or Abraham-other biblical references. I love it anyway! It is well connected from beginning to end.
-
Like the positive tones and thoughts in these lines - He certainly does give one hope; that faith keeps us strong and moving through anything that can arise. Gives us a future too in heaven with Him when our time here has finished.
-
Soulful
You don't have to be Christian to understand a person's belief in something. I like the rhyme and the content. Well at least I mostly like the rhyme, except for the anointing-understanding lines. Maybe it's the way I say it. This seems like you didn't really know a lot about your religion in the beginning ("blindly journey," "dumb and young"), then you became more Christian as you learned more. Well done. -
well done
I loved the rhythm of this piece, but not the content. I am a pagan so the whole Christian thing is so not my gig. But be that as it may it was beautifully written and I could tell you felt it to the depths of your soul. So for that Well done and keep it up.
Darkest Thoughts Always
D.C. -
The writing is good, but I'm an atheist so I can't agree with the god angle, splendid writing however.
-
Bravo!!
This is the second piece I've read of yours.....and again I wasn't disappointed. I love that it speaks of receiving Christ before really understanding .......and that with growth there was an understanding and a sincerity in the choice that was made.....as well the happiness that the choice was made. You have a wonderful gift and I look forward to reading more of your work!
-
Beautiful piece. Deeply emotive and commited. You have portrayed emotion and devotion to the highest order in a piece which flows freely expessing itself well. Good job.
-
It's so rare to stumble upon poetry that is as strong and rivoting as this piece here is. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
♥ Touchof1der -
Indeed this poem was good, Although im not much of a christian boy myself. I still liked this poem.
-
It is a very good religious poem ..I'm saying this and i'm not religious at all. It is a very straight to the point poem and praises christianity well=)
-
Good
I do not believe that there is a God. But this was quite beautiful. I'm glad that you have the confidence in your beliefs to write good poetry such as this poem about them.
-
nice work makes my soul want 2 cry out for the heavenly gates
-
This is a beautiful poem..very well written..speechless ..good job
-
This is such a wonderful poem about faith. You have written this so beautifully and with such a lovely message. Well done for winning the trophy.
-
well written
Well you got on the honor roll..
But I'm confused about your tongue
I think you had more than God on your mind
hmm?
-
Awesome how beautiful I am glad God has blessed you!!!! Write on!
-
Very interesting. At first I got kind of an anti-god message with the "young and dumb" thing, but it grew into somewhat of a story of learning.
at least from my perspective.
I liked it. Kudos.
-
Yay! It's nice that this is a message, but yet it's a celebration and a testimony all at once. Happy stuff like this are always things I'm eager to read, and I like reading about peoples' journey of faith and their walks with God. Thanks for sharing.
-
I agree, it does sound genuine. I liked this, even though i dont normally like spiritual poetry. Nice job.
-
Excellent
I wasnt sure at first if I would like sometheing spirtuial or not, but this really touched my inner being -
sounds so genuine
I like this because it sounds so genuine, so heartfelt. Also, I thought it documented a journey in faith really well. I'm sure this subject matter must sometimes be tempting to write more and more about - but this poem is effective because it doesn't labor the point - each line seems purposeful and is not duplicated or repeated.
-
Excellent write, the message and flow is exceptional, like a few others i've read of yours. You truely have a gift and I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
-
well presented with a bucketfull of meaning
-
Beautiful and well structured! The flow and rhyme
is easy as well. The message, clear and concise and you've put the punctuation in all the right places.
How blessed you are!
Keep penning!
~The INC." -
wow i love your poem inflicted wounds to my soul from my lack of understanding have been healed by the power of christ personal anointing
it is a hard subject to write about because christianity because we all have so many differant
veiws on this subject and i am pleased that you are found
-
This is quite a wonderful poem that I've stumbled across
That which i am, quite happy to comment~
For this poem, I see how religious life has given you a second breath for life. I commend that you've found healing from finding Christ, however I sadly have stopped practicing my faith and found myself in a road of individualism. Single and alone, quite lost in fact. However, my life is based upon my choosing, and I'm glad that you've found a path from which this poem portrays. It's those persons with clear eyes and spirit that amazes me...
For your poem, I enjoyed your rhymes and the rhythm of the beat in the poem. Furthermore, what shines in this poem, is probably the aura of the Christ saving your soul. Anywho, thanks for sharing this poem, and I pray that your pen never dries its fountain.
~Ibs
-
This is an amazing poem of devotion and love... it made me smile congratulations on the honorable mention, it was well deserved... this is a wonderful poem and I'm glad I stumbled upon it
Keep writing
Polly -
Faith can cure most, but life now is so hard for us all. There is comfort in faith, yet in life now reality of things are so heavy to indure. Nice work, thanks for sharing
-
NIcely written. Deserves the Honorable winner. Well done.
-
My invisible scars
are plain for anyone to see,
as I blindly journey on…
This path of Christianity.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
My scared and murky past
is there for all to see
as I walk with Christ’s own faith
The road He’s set for me.
I know you heart is in the right place. It’s just that if something is invisible, you may know it’s there but you can’t actually see it. And I think I saw it written somewhere that God gives us enough light to walk in so we don’t have to journey blindly. Forgive me if I’m out of line.
-
Now my soul graciously sings
with overflowing joy!
For redemption has been granted
to this formerly, lost boy.
This is indeed a touching expression revealing the depth of the inside of yours.. my friend..well done..
-
Now my soul graciously sings
with overflowing joy!
For redemption has been granted
to this formerly, lost boy.
a warmness is flowing in the words..well done..and thanks for the entry
-
A beautiful and sincere picture of a soul's salvation.
Adding your comment:
1 - 35 of 35
