She kissed him slowly
With so much passion
[remebering thats how she kissed her ex]
She stoped and hugged him
He held her close and whispered he loved her
[but thats what he did too]
She held his hand
He swung their hands back and forth
[just how they used to]
They went to the beach
And splashed each other
[playfully like before]
He told her he loved her
And actually meant it
[she remembered when he said that]
She was so scared of getting hurt again
She [cried] cried
[it was over] She ended it
Author notes
The stuff in [] is supposed to be flashbacks of being with her ex
A contest entry
- Three by Nam.
425 points, ended October 5, 2007, 14 entries
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wao this was truly amazing!thought these word-combinations are quite simple, i can totally feel the emotional energy poured within!the structure of this poem has ahuge effect upon the reader!well done!congratulations! -
I enjoyed your poem.
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definately in my final list list!!!!!!!!
i comepletely adored this piece!!!!!!!!!
my favorite so far!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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thank you so much for entering this beautiful poem into my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you again
and good luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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"[but thats what he did to]" - "to" at the end would be "too", it means "as well".
"And actully meant it" - "actully" would be "actually".
Quaint.
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This is really good i like it alot keep up the good work and ill make sure that i keep reading just return the favor.
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