Happiness...
Curse me not with happiness
But rather pain.
As only jubilance can spawn true misery,
And in sorrow one can find comfort
Within the familiarity of its monotony.
It is not anguish but in joy that I find anxiety.
For with the arrival of happiness
The anticipation of its acolyte is thick.
And when the illusion dissipates
The suffering left behind is
Undying unbearable and Unreal.
No, it is not the pain
That threatens to tear open fresh stitches
And bleed out the remaining drops of me.
It is not the pain
That floods my masculinity
With the overflowing of deeply hidden wells,
It is the fear of you.
Do not come closer
For it's you who brings out the tears in me.
A contest entry
- Fresh Freestyle Free Verse!! by requiempoet.
900 points, ended September 27, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1706 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Terrific!! I'm almost lost for words... but everything that everyone else has said!!
Ahhh... the torture of love!
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This is an interesting piece of saddened thought you have penned here, but not quite what I was looking for. It is however - well expressed and nicely detailed. Best wishes!!
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The end was very touching. One that many will relate too. It's true what they say that we can love someone so much we hate them. The truth is the ones that hurt us have so much hurt of their own they don't know what else to do. Nice job and congrats on the hm...
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even tho i no it not really about that i can still relate THANX
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i try and write like this as i am in constant pain with my genetic thing.But i CANT.really good man.J
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"No, it is not the pain
That threatens to tear open fresh stitches
And bleed out the remaining drops of me."
my fav part by far. this is a great poem and congrats on the honorable mention.
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well writen
totaly agreeable I hold the same vew on pain and sorrow
they are great teachers.
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wow I really enjoyed that. I could feel the words it was just so, amazing. I can't even put words to it.. the flow was really awesome, each line went with the next one perfectly. I just really liked it!
with love and gigles, the white rabbit
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Believe me, I am not one to say this but... I wouldn't change a thing in this. I thought this was perfect just as it is. It is deep and powerful. The imagery is great also, just enough to make this moving and powerful at the same time. I will be back, you can count on it. I am glad you came to my poetry as I may have missed out on this poem as I still do not know how to search effectively yet...hehe. :-)
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simply amazing
i felt over-whelmed by this poem, i've faced that feeling twice, in my blind rage of blinding love. you spoke amazingly of the feelings caused by lost love.
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A distracting poem that harbours such deepness within itself. Its darkness is hardly given light. Strong, sensitive, disturbing.
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Oh. You seem so sad anymore...
You seem like you need a big hug! 
This is a very expressive poem. I'm glad to see that you are writing again but you don't seem much better. I thought I remembered that you used to be happier. It's sad when a person gets to a point that they fear being happy because they feel like it will only be taken from them. I really hope you find peace and a little love for yourself. I think you deserve it. 
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Thanks for the kind words Miss lady and the hug. People say its just a phase im going through. I'm sure they're right. do not fret! lol
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I love the last line. Very sad and it brings up a lot of questions that I'm not going to ask!! I like it just for that simple reason!!! I like that you used a bunch of I don't know...darkish words.
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