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Touching You

 

Your hands ran against my skin
Your breath mingled with mine
Just the touch of your lips against mine
Was like a drugless high

Your sweat was sweeter than your honey coloured skin
Your tongue explored my body and my heart
Each caress fueled with passion
Each breathless scream filled with pleasure

My hands which were no longer mine
Pulled you deeper into me
Your hands melted into my thighs
And 'I love you' was whispered into my burning skin

Touching you was touching heaven
And I'd gladly die again
If I could be in heaven again

Author notes

Urm, well its meant to be more spiritual than sexual. Not sure if its working, as this urm 'area' is very much known to me, so all critiques greatly appreciated!

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  • ednatee
    October 18, 2007
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    i really loved this...exact expression of feeling(giving and getting love and physical love


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 15, 2007

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    another good one take a look at my newest I'm Riding upon the Dunes or something like that is new can't remember the name sorry


  • eleno
    September 29, 2007

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    Hmm,, well im srry i havent replied last time, i dont wuite remember why i havnt. most likely i was in a hurry to log out, that happens sometimes. About the poem, WOW, i can relate to that. and i can see how it is spiritual too, because...sounds like you describe physical closeness, comeing out of a true feeling and passion, i know whats that like so i recognize it. Well passed emotions, and thank you for sharing, and for kindly reminding me to comment. please forgive me for that. Peace


  • thecrow94
    September 27, 2007
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    it's very good. it's something that the reader can relate to.


  • VirginiaDarling
    September 27, 2007

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    okay well it sounds more sexual to me, thats the picture i got in my head while reading this. I thought it was a very good poem though. You did a great job, but if you want more spirituality in this you need to take some of the sexy stuff out or just change a few words.

    • Redtearstains
      September 27, 2007
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      well its meant to be more spiritually sentually sexual. There are no references to men and womens 'areas'. the closest there is to a rude body part is thigh. Its more suggestive than anything else. Its more about making love than having sex, I wanted to give the term more meaning that what it currently posseses. But I respect and apriceiate your comment and am glad you took the time to read it.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    September 27, 2007

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    I thought it was very well done. It took me in right away and kept me interested till the end. I could feel a spiritual sense to it, not just a sexual. Great job.
    Soulful Woman


  • WulfDiamondLou33
    September 27, 2007

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    My hands which were no longer mine
    Pulled you deeper into me
    Your hands melted into my thighs
    And 'I love you' was whispered into my burning skin



    I LOVE THIS!!!!! i am just now writing about love or sex...or anything close to and and i hope to get as good as this one day. may you could read my poem sweet darkness and tell me what you think??

    Diamond


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    September 27, 2007
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    very lovely write


  • ChemicalArtemis
    September 27, 2007
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    Beautiful. Absoulutly (spelt wrong I know).
    Loved it.

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