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{Blonde One}

Your  hands in mine
Our lips as one.

A shiver down my spine
Your teeth along my neck

A smoky smell
A fire lit

My intoxicating nerves
Your cool demeanor

Your gorgeous smile
Complete with fangs

A snarl escapes your lips
I beckon you with a finger

Soon enough I'm in your arms
Lay your deadly kiss...

Author notes

This particular piece was inspired by a dream... or perhaps i really do have a vampyre lover... whos to say? V'''V

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  • pruedence
    January 29, 2008

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    Sexually done...nice dream...well expressed feelings of lust/love. Short yet says and feels alot. Well done, thanks for sharing


  • HeLovesMeNot
    January 29, 2008
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    Wow....Vampires,it was a good read.


  • TheElf gold member
    January 29, 2008
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    Very enticing! Beautiful imagery and the choice of words is excellent. It left me many options as to what the poem is about. You could be writing about a lover, a vampire, your German Shepherd...Smile

     

    But I think it's your vampire lover.

     

    Good work


  • venenum
    December 10, 2007
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    I love it! Vampires flippin rock!


  • xDarKRosE
    September 27, 2007

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    I loved it.. It had love in it and then a twist to it. Vampires..

    "Soon enough I'm in your arms
    Lay your deadly kiss..."
    Great write... my favorite part. I could imagine it in my head. Lovely piece. Keep up the good work!!

    -Tammy

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