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My Lover, My Monster

I would see her now and then,
While running through the woods.
Arisen from the grave,
A spirit from the hoods.

I was scared, I ran from her,
But she always chased me down.
Grabbed my hair, bit my neck,
And threw me on the ground.

She was cold to the touch,
But warm on the inside.
I forgot that she was dead
Her desire to abide.

~and she gratified me~

So now on misty mornings,
I always run again.
Looking for the monster,
That will take me in again.











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  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 13, 2007
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    Great write here

    You spun this one very well very well indeed


  • Beating gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    Okay that was just creepy. And if I understood right, just disgusting. But I guess that was the point, right? I really felt like I was running through the woods, like I too was chased. Your words really sucked me in. Great job!


  • esroddo silver member
    September 29, 2007
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    Wow that was super creepy and sick, But in a lovely way. To love the dead. Thank you fore entering and good luck LISA
    I enjoyed these lines;
    "She was cold to the touch,
    But warm on the inside.
    I forgot that she was dead
    Her desire to abide.

    ~and she gratified me~"


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 28, 2007
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    fab! Loved the line...

    I forgot that she was dead.

    Bravo! And good luck!


  • ennovy silver member
    September 27, 2007

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    Now this is scary a female monster! guess what...there whole bunch of them all over this place we call earth....Boooooooo! I loved this write its very creative, and your imagery is vividly awesome....I loved it. excellent tale....I love you, Novy


  • rebel lips
    September 27, 2007

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    wow, your gonna give me nightmares

    She was cold to the touch,
    But warm on the inside.
    I forgot that she was dead
    Her desire to abide.-----ACE!

    thanks for a great read


  • onesugar gold member
    September 27, 2007
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    Wicked B

    I loved it, just brilliant
    Good Luck B
    Love you ~sugar~

  • Just4u
    September 27, 2007

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    Tween cradle and coldness
    Tween fear and alive
    The souls ever searching
    to help it get by

    Tween laughter and loving
    Tween sorrow and gain
    again keep returning
    to what helps us remain

    Have a great week...

    Eddy

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