robin red-breasted
nests on her summer trestle
sycamore bone dance
Author notes
"This is a great form of poetry that flows from my thoughts though the picture I see is greater, I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
A contest entry
- Haiku, write of Insects or Birds by InBetweenThoughts by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended September 29, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very good I loved this once excellent haiku
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I love that last line...
reminding us of all that living
things can see when they look
with hearts and instinct instead
of eyes. Blue
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Nicely fresh look at a long-time favorite bird...one that threatens cliches in its wake but here tastefully avoids them. Well done.
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Has any one every stopped and told you that you are awesome lately? YOU ARE AWESOME!
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Good morning, thank you for your Haiku..the images you have created are wonderful as is the form, though your counts in the second line are off as there are 8. May I suggest;Red-breasted robin,
nests on her summer trestle~
sycamore bone dance.Best wishes...Ken IBT
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Beautiful imagery with this haiku!
I love robins. Your third line is pure magic.
Knight70
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bone dance...
Lovely! I don't know much about this form of poetry... but I love the way it rolls off the tongue! Well done! Good luck in the contest!
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Wow, I love all the assonance you used in these words - excellent poem - beautiful imagery!
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