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I Want

i         

am   
a glow
   a flicker
   of light that
will  ignite  the
   torch of your soul.
   I am an everlasting
   ember of love that is   
thirsty for an  inferno. 
i want the heat of my
heart to be the  reason
    you are drawn to me like  
      a  moth  to a warm flame,
     I want you to need me
   and I  want your
       ember of love
     glowing
deep
in
me forever  and ever.  I want to
be the everlasting flame that will
glow  in  your eyes  when others
look at you. so come and let me
light the tinder of your heart and
be the cause  of a  raging inferno.

 

 

 

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  • artis
    November 21, 2008

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    No need to wax or wane over such a request, it is

    an inferno of warmth to a lonely soul, casting a glowing beam in the eyes of its reciever, brighter then ten thousand suns going super nova. Love the candle shape, the rather large flame says it all~~~Artis


  • ronnica
    December 7, 2007

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    Ah the flame of love still burning, A good shape sending a glowing message, I liked this very much thank you for your entry,


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    December 7, 2007

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    Very nicely crafted concrete poem, good shape and meaningful message. Well Done!

    Dennis


  • EveryRoseHasThorns
    December 2, 2007

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    wow

    i thought this was a normal poetry contest oh well ive lost i really like yours thank you i really enjoyed it


    • Amera gold member
      December 2, 2007
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      Thanks for the comment. Concrete poetry is another name for shape poetry.


  • motel silver member
    December 1, 2007
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    the look of this poem and the poem itself is full of depth. thank you.


  • DrunkenRam
    November 29, 2007
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    Oooh! this is really good, great imagination.


  • SpecialGurl89
    November 5, 2007

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    This is great

    I'm loving your heat!!! I love what you've done with the colors and the shape. Your last line is beautiful. I've been reading a lot of your poetry the last few minutes and I think it's wonderful. Keep writing.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    October 17, 2007
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    holey smokes, you've painted, sculpted, and written to perfection...congrats!!!


  • samara11278
    October 16, 2007
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    Wow. This is beautiful.
    I love the metaphor of the fire.
    Great job!


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 29, 2007

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    show off
    this is fabulous, darling.
    How could anyone resist your
    flame?

    Lane


  • HaleyMary
    September 28, 2007

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    This is beautiful and a refreshing write. I'm used to reading sonnets by you and then you write a poem like this. I also like how you put the letters that were in the form of a flame in different colors as to resemble the light of a flame in a candle. Also liked how you compared the flame to a feeling of love in the piece. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    September 27, 2007

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    this is masterfully created and it's beautiful and just excellent on all levels. keep writing amera


  • darkknight marellus
    September 27, 2007

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    Wow! I really liked how you did this poem. Great job on the shape! Was it difficult? How'd you fix it so that the fonts were different colors like that??!! It's awesome! I love the imagery and clear voice you wrote in. It really makes an awesome poem. Great job! I think you did excellent on this! I think I'm gonna have to read some of your other works now!

    Awesome job, and hope to see more from you in the future as well!

    Akasha


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    September 27, 2007

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    I havent really seen much like this, I really enjoyed it and love how you presented it to the reader There is a strength behind your words. Great job


  • Tarja
    September 27, 2007

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    Okay... just... have me now! You have totally won me over heart and soul with this single piece! I just love it. The image you created... the colors and of course the poem itself... everything was just so creative and divine! I think I had a poetic orgasm while reading this


  • Nicolette Everett
    September 27, 2007

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    Wow, this is amazing and how you presented the poem is really great too. I love the whole thing of the poem. The emotion and everything you where expressing was really good.
    Hope you win!


  • bonjourbunnie
    September 27, 2007
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    simply stunning. the passion in the words is enough to send chills up my spine.


  • PerVirtuous
    September 27, 2007

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    I love it when you showoff. My chest swells and my head turns to see who is looking. This is fabulous. You ruined my chances in this contest, but what to hey... (btw... I accept)


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 27, 2007

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    Cubbie me dear,

    this is simply marvelous, really, a perfect lesson for your elves, they wll be most impressed. As we are,
    without a doubt. beautifulous!


    Dad


  • jo-el
    September 27, 2007

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    wonderful. the metaphor. the visual stimulation..perfect. the heat in your words ..sooo appropriate. excellent..i don't have any other words


  • Pisces Pieces
    September 27, 2007

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    It is quite likely I will always be amazed by you! I've seen some shape poems, but I don't think I've ever seen anything this amazing. I love how the shape compliments the poem, in more than one way too. There is a sense of sensuality as well...and well, I don't need to go on and on, we can all see and know the depth and beauty of this piece in so much more than just its words.

    Stunning.

    ♥


  • StarEyes
    September 27, 2007

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    Holy Smokes!!! Not only a wonderful read, but in shape poetry as well! You go girl! Amazing!!! I love it.

    Best of luck in this contest!!!

    and much love

    Nyetta


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    September 27, 2007
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    What a beautiful flame of words you have penned!

    Be Well


    • Amera gold member
      September 27, 2007
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      thanks mark!


      • The Voice Of One silver member
        September 27, 2007

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        to ignite a flame, you have indeed
        succeeded well and sown the seed
        of a passion that does burn inside
        the heat within me does reside

        to learn the skill, to write the same
        the flame does show this ain't a game
        no class will I be shown absent
        this teachers clearly heaven sent

        for form you sit in place, a queen
        no other soul can reign supreme
        so to crown you with another gold
        will surely leave the others cold




  • sociaL IntollErance
    September 27, 2007
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    this is the best piece i have seen on the entire site so far, amazing!


    • Amera gold member
      September 27, 2007
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      What a wonderful comment. Thank you.

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