A sheep sat alone in the field
surrounded by snow isolation
waiting for the sun to blow it away.
Singing so the quiet of his voice disappears
as a wolf like creature harmonizes her song
granting her one last torn wound.
It's as if years have scattered need on her
for when he comes back, her dried blood is happy,
just to be burnt like her strength.
The curls on her brown fur straightening
sampling loneliness once more
unbearable this time, they rise in sorrow
to rid her of her senses.
She didn't want to be possessed
just sucked back into the universe,
only this time, as a person.
Author notes
There used to be footnotes but I took them off so people could interpret it in their own way. If you want them, just send a message.
Maria
Please tell me what you think
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great write here..good luck in the contest
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Excellent
I think this is a very fine write and you expressed yourself quite well. The footnotes were also quite helpful. Thanks for sharing. -
This kicks ass!
Great job and your very unique! -
So being a lone sheep in a field made you susceptible to attack? And afterward you realized that by not being a lone sheep and being human you couldn't be preyed upon?
Kinda like you are in-control of yourself again and not helpless? Well at any rate I liked the analogy and the way you explained your intent made me give it several reads to make sure i got it right!! Good work. -
Maria, You are most definitely a person and a lovely young lady. If he is not feeling what you do then it is his loss my dear niece. Don't let him keep you in a lonely place any longer. You are still young and there are plenty of fish in the ocean. Your heart should be concentrating on enjoying these young years in your life. You are back where you wanted to be and that should be a positive factor for you. I know it hurts right now, it will hurt less each day. Be young while you are and have fun. This was a powerful piece fill with so much of your heart and all of your emotions soaring through your pen. My thoughts and prayers are with you. Love always, from your auntie Joyce xoxoxoxoxo
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wow!
i love it maria as i have told you already!!! you have a beautiful way with words! i really love this! i think different people who read it can relate to it in diff ways! i love you
ana
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that was wow
luv u lodes
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