She walked down the aisle of hell,
desperate and alone
she thought she would
enjoy this nightmare.
[she bolted upright
quaking - drenched with sweat]
She breathed the vile breath
of sin and destiny,
terror overtaking her body.
Temptation licking, tickling her
senses.
crocodile tears fell
away,
this life...yeah
she knows
it's over.
Author notes
I know...not my best.
Writers block. You know the story.
In a list
...I'm writing just to write...
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if you have writters block then man you have some great tallent....this poem may be shor but my god its deep...if you could id like it if you read some of my work i put on here and let me know what you think
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Like everyone else said, this is amazing for someone with writer's block. This one is very special. Your lucky to have grasped this idea out of all the ideas blicked from your mind. I think this poem is about a girl who seems to feel like she's dying instead of living. That's just what I got from it. Well done.
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I like this. I love the line, "she walked down the aisle of hell." It brings the image of marriage to mind which connects to her marrying herself to some sort of horrific life that she feels is forever binding. I like this!
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tis, is good take out crocadile tears... its over used your too original for that... i really like this great writing and i really loved the flow of this piece
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well if this is writers block I am amazed, I must further my investigation to view more of your amazing work!
excellent
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This is pretty good for having writers block! I love the flow! Amazing job!
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this was a cool stage of writers block not to bad here it didnt speak writers block at all good job
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Well thank you Rose Petals!!! that certainly means a lot to me!!
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