She knew all the answers,
when the needle was plunged
deep into her skin.
She was a former shell
of a human.
She dripped with shame,
a junkie of heroin and
cocaine.
Grinding against the
groins
of overly sexual men.
Her memories began to melt
into each other,
ripping, shirts
tearing into her body.
Strong hands holding her down.
It wasn't suppose to be like this.
She was left naked,
dying on the asphalt.
When she rubbed the sex
and drugs from her eyes,
she emerged -
a butterfly.
Author notes
So, hopefully my writers block isn't kicking my ass totally. Though, I haven't been able to write without the help of a word bank for quite sometime.
In a list
...I'm writing just to write...
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This is really nice love the wording and the flow Doesn't seem to be kicking your butt that bad.
Cara
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this is ....amzing
i love it all the things shes done and all of the thing going on she stell made it out give people hope
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this is Kill
Good it has No cut cards
you are religious with the theme
though we feel her pain
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this is an very image filled poem, and I find this sad, but powerful write! I loved the twist at the end, this is very smooth, and wonderful, thank you for sharing
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this is great writing the endding really great writing you can write writers block or not wonderful som lil internal ryhmns in ths i like too
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Such sad imagery, this is just a sad poem though. I enjoyed the ending, it shows how an experience like that can change you for the better. Nice job
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This poem and my poem "The Mourning Started Long Ago" could totally be in the same poem book. I think I should make a poem book with poems like this in it and all proceeds should go to some good cause charity thing. I also think I should stop thinking up new ideas and finish the ones I have already started!
This is an awesome poem, Rosita Bonita, very vivid, heart wrenching and what an incredible ending. I can so see her dying shell of a body with the beautiful butterfly emerging from her body and fluttering away. I so wish I could draw and paint the images that you create in my mind with your poems. But, would have to learn how to do that, and again should work on the things I already have in progress.
Love you!
Momma Bella
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Thank very kindly for the comment Momma Bella and I think that it's amazing that I create wonderful pictures in your head!!!
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