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Innocence in rub of hip
seductive smile on half-curled lip
a press, a slide, in dance with you
alone ‘neath woods in evening’s dew

forehead to shoulder, cheek to shirt
a lash’s propensity to innocently flirt
a push and pull of backbone’s curve
a sudden swing, a quickened swerve

I am flung out to bring stepping back
to again heart to heart by pulse’s track
and slide within your dear arm’s fold
to sheltered be while I am old

for dance does not end on moonlight floor
this sway and weave to bedroom’s door
we’ve paced these steps a hundred times
and moved these moves to higher climes.

Author notes

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TNw4Q4f7DbQ

prompt: B, song title, I Just Want To Dance With You,

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  • lilAj
    December 13, 2007
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    jeez Carol! this is great!

  • PureCountry
    October 1, 2007

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    Absolutely Beautiful

    This write has all the nuance of a finely crafted piece of prose. Yet it speaks wonderfully to dancing and the dance of life itself.

    I am in awe of your ability to pen such thoughts with so few words. I myself have to convey many to accomplish so little in comparison. ( Or so it seems at times. )

    Many thanks for sharing this with us here in the contest. Best of Luck to You as well!


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      October 1, 2007
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      So seldom do I rhyme and/or rhyme well, but this one simply danced itself into being. I appreciate your comments and the gold...and this is a new personal favorite.... it speaks of something scared and dear.


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 27, 2007

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    "Innocence in rub of hip
    seductive smile on half-curled lip
    a press, a slide, in dance with you
    alone ‘neath woods in evening’s dew"

    "Half~curled lip"??? You been in the woods dancin' with Elvis again, my Sister??? Very pretty, my Friend. Seductive swaying & symphonic sounds. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. Yeahhh, I enjoyed his comment, too.


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      October 1, 2007
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      ty gf......how this came to be a rhyuming poem, I do not know, but it came comfortably...like the dance.


  • michael thomas gold member
    September 27, 2007

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    Oh!! Give me my bible nightstand. The lady makes me blush with sweaty hands. My hip replacement and my knees are new so keep the light on a little longer for psalm twenty two.


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      October 1, 2007
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      this still makes me chuckle...Michael Thomas..you are so dear a pen friend... whose comments mean much.


  • Nicolette gold member
    September 27, 2007

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    Love this one! "for dance does not end on moonlight floor"... indeed sister, indeed... it should go on to those "higher climes". You make me feel like dancing - wonderful poem with a lovely singing quality about it.

    ~ Nicolette

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