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Beautiful Girl

A beautiful girl
With a beautiful smile
She touched my soul
I’ve watched her sitting for a while.

She talks like an angel
Her voice is so sweet
I was staring at her as usual
As like if I cannot quit.

At that moment I was dreaming of her as if she is mine forever
And I had nothing to say
Then a boy came to her and they hold their hands together
And walked away.

It hit me like a lightening and thunder
A tear rolled down through my eye
I knew I will never have her
And my heart began to cry.

A moment so precious I cannot forget
Leaving a hunger for her soul
I cannot explain that,
I’m still thinking about this beautiful girl.

-Shuberth Dias-


I Wrote This Poem On 21 August 2007 2:40:47 PM When I Was 20 Years old

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  • LovingAngelForever
    November 4, 2008

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    This is a wonderfully written poem. I love the last 4 lines.

    "A moment so precious I cannot forget
    Leaving a hunger for her soul
    I cannot explain that,
    I’m still thinking about this beautiful girl."

    It definitely shows what a vivid impression she made. Very beautiful write.


  • No longer in use
    October 18, 2008

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    This is a poem well written. But if I must say if you start with a rhyme continue with it. Some of the ending words don't really rhyme. But with everything else it's a wonderful job. Continue in your writing ways.


  • Manish
    October 8, 2008
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    This is good. The first stanza says the poem's got something. I like your rhymes, and the poem is catchy. The second I thought the first line of the third stanza is too long. Next I'm surprised it sounds more than okay, when I read '...walked away'. O come on! Why's this poem so beautiful and yet so without hope? Never mind, it's a beautiful poem.


  • Lexie
    May 18, 2008
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    love this poem to! it is veryy very good... my favorite part was:
    "At that moment I was dreaming of her as if she is mine forever
    And I had nothing to say
    Then a boy came to her and they hold their hands together
    And walked away."
    it was very touching and real. Great poem! so cute and sad at the same time!


  • Pain Angel
    September 27, 2007
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    awww this is so cute! lol

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