Lost the head today,
He took it from me,
Magical darkness illuminates,
Confusion strikes me as I see,
Forever alive; headless,
Watching myself as time passes,
Terrible and marvelous I feel,
In the hands of another,
My body I can look upon,
How will walking be possible?
Who will feed me?
By the hands of a mad man,
Infatuated by my love,
Took my thoughts,
Holding them always,
I befall a slave,
Prisoner by his hands,
Exposed I experience my emotions,
Escape my cadaver in red,
Marked upon his hand,
I elude my existence,
Headless and misplaced,
My void he bears,
His eyes taunt me,
His breath is anesthetized,
My intelligence speculates,
As I abide in his palm,
He genuflects at my feet,
He triumphs me over,
Forever lacking my memories,
Twinge is jagged in my neck,
He kisses my disengaged head,
My remains feel nonentity,
Exclusive of my brain,
My body feels insensitive,
Never shall I suffer an individual’s touch,
My body becomes dormant,
The world spins before me,
Confusion hold unyielding,
Flighty from no senses,
I want to relinquish my will,
Living light keeps me in motion,
Invested to the sting of demise,
Seized by Death’s bitter hands,
Cursed to survive headless
The slave becomes the master,
Master bows before the slave,
Headless Princess; now at his leniency,
Parallel and lost in the abyss,
Clemency discards no color,
Mercy lets go of transience,
Eternally animate; beheaded Princess
Perpetually Am I
Author notes
I pick option 2. I was inspired by this picture I created just for this contest. Please click on the link below to see the picture.
http://storywrite.com/images/ext/Item/112/685.jpg?1190897608
NakedHeart, Am I
59 lines
A contest entry
- 3396 Total Points to be awarded: Rounds contest!!!! Final gold winner 1500 points!!!! Round 2! by opaqueangel.
900 points, ended October 10, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
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I could feel the pain of this person pulsing through my veins.. you wrote this with a clear elegance. Great Job.
Good Luck in the contest!!!!!!!!!!!
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NH I have to say that I love this write! The way you wove your words together was magnificent! I throughly enjoyed the tale told in this piece. It fits perfectly with the pic. And I see what you where talking about with the picture.
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thank you for your wonderful words. I thought you would like it. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you my Friend.
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You have done very well with these write, the flow is great the tones are set and the imagery is a grandstand ~ well written good luck to you
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Thank you. I altered the picture at the bottom of the page to go with this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much.
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very well written, amazing, i really enjoyed this piece...
"By the hands of a mad man,"
that was my favourite line...best of luck in the contest
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Thank you. I am glad you liked this one. The picture is one I designed myself. WEll I altered it a bit to suit my poem. thank you again.
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I love it, in my opinion it has winner stamped on it hun.It fits the picture like a hand to a glove, I can't find fault any where, the imagery and flow are divine. Good luck hunni.
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Dear NH
In response to your request; genuflect needs an "s" and some others but I don't have enough time to pour over this; however it is different with an edge.
Whether or not you'll win: I don't know, winning is a state of mind not someone picking what they are in the mood for or like the best. You entered and to me that's where the magick lives.
Good luck and keep the ink flowing Friend
Love,
liquid
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Thank you for reading. I will go fix this problem right away. Thank you. I hope it does well.
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This fits the picture perfectly
but it goes beyond that
I love the metaphors--
a person stealing ones mind- their intellect
a horrible violation..
and the hopless feeling of
not being able to get back what
he stole...
There's so much going on in this
piece --so much deeply profound meaning
Tho' it's horribly sad
you write beautifully
Thanks for sharing
and Good luck!
~Pastel
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Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it so much. I hope it does well in the contest. Only time will tell.
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Absolutly amazing!!!! Very well done! I loved this peice so much, I can not seem to think of words that could do justice to this peice! Good luck in round 2! Normaly I don't applase contestant enries but here you go...
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Thank you. I put my all into this one. I even disigned the picture to help me write this one. Thank you.
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Wow, this was absoloutly breathtaking. I think that for sure you will win the contest your entering.. I know i'd give you the gold!
Wow, loved it.. good luck!
<3
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read this piece. I hope it does do well.
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