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Flies.

three house flies -- going
this way and that way then this
again and again

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in Shiki style

three flies
going this way that way
then this

In a list

A contest entry

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  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    October 8, 2007

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    Interesting

    This isa very unusual poem because of the creatues like that but then again I enjoyed this alot. any ways very nice work with this haiku and much enjoyed it alot. keep up the good work and congrats on Silver.


  • ronnica
    October 5, 2007
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    That is what they do, kind of a maddening crowd.
    Sh, they are here now.


  • Emerald13
    September 30, 2007

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    heh ... lovely ... how you solved the padding issue is what made me giggle ... nicely done ... congrats on the silver >>> Gina

  • InBetweenThoughts
    September 29, 2007

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    Thank you for your Haiku, very interesting flies can be such pests, once they start bugging you they don't let up until..SWAT!!! Great form, flow & counts, best wishes, Ken IBT

  • Virgoan
    September 27, 2007

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    This is a beautiful Haiku. The way you added humour makes this an exceptional Haiku. Very effective

    Thanks for sharing and keep on writing my friend.

    VIRGOAN


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    September 27, 2007

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    LOL..this gave me a much needed laugh! Thank you. Today for the first time in life, I wish I was a fly so I could fly off from my painful family..

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