Notebook Pages by Gentle Lion at All poetry

Look at me and make me fly;
Bring truth to petty penciled lies.
Little hearts encase your name
But in your heart it's not the same
As in my notes, between the lines
Where imagination is not confined
To one's own head and frowned upon,

Where secret love can carry on.

Author notes

3.If you do not understand my silence, how will you understand my words?

A contest entry

In Search Of An AP Family by xTomorrowx. 600 points, ended October 3, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Turn those greenies into Gold (or silver or bronze) pt 8 by whispernthedark. 700 points, ended October 25, 2008, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Please tell me what you think

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Xxpoison.kissesxX
June 7
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This has great flow! Good rhyme :]
whispernthedark
October 18, 2008
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Nice write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

♥
whisper
Romeo Dragonheart
September 2, 2008

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I love it, Its great and show wonderful expression, I can just see it forming on a page in my own notebooks as I'm supposed to be following some long winded lecture or another, Great work. Keep the pen flowing my freind
later
Romeo
Elle Kaye
August 28, 2008

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I really loved this and im SO glad i clicked on it. It has sent all sorts of ideas spinning in my head. Beautifully writte and a nice take on the prompt, congrats on the well earned HM.
Samantha Marie
August 28, 2008
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oooh i love your style. this is the style i hope to have! i try lol GOOD WORK
LaVieBohemme
December 18, 2007
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great one! i love it. nice job and best of luck in this contest!!!!!
~~~rocklover91~~~
psychiatrists dream
December 10, 2007
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well written, thanks for entering and good luck!
Fedrizzi
December 8, 2007

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beautiful write, and in your author notes, its funny, since that is basically one of my friend's mottos, anywho, wonderful, and it is beautiful, ty for your entry and best of luck in the contest (^.^)
Sinnastarr
November 2, 2007

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This was a good read. Short but sweet. I enjoyed the flow and the rhyme scheme. I liked the lines,
"As in my notes, between the lines
Where imagination is not confined"
Well done.
Thank you so much for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck.
RedwingSpirit
October 22, 2007
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very nice poem congrats on the honorable mention trophy keep up the good writes
earthstar
October 22, 2007
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Look at me and make me fly;
Bring truth to petty penciled lies.

Very strong introduction that pulls the reader into the poem. I like the Line.
As in my notes, between the lines
It give impact to the write. The ending is great.
Where secret love can carry on.

This write is very well done. It has clear and strong pictures that commutate to the reader.
The Axe Shall Fall
October 22, 2007

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I loved this poem because there are some amazing lines which have some great images. I absolutely adore the first line "Look at me and make me fly" it has such great imagery in such a simple line. It also good that you have written a poem about unrequited love but it is not using the same old "I hate my life" concept which makes this not only a great write but also unique!
Axe
tanzanite
October 1, 2007

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I love this concept. you wrote a lovely piece of poetry here and I enjoyed it a lot. Good luck in this contest. Your work is refreshing and I will return to read you again.
xTomorrowx
September 26, 2007

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thanks heaps for your entry, i really enjoyed reading it, its a great piece =)
thanks for your entry, i'd love to have an uncle! =)
good luck in my contest =)